Don't Wear Cologne

Description

A story of serendaing told from Changjo's point of view. There's a girl he's got his eyes on but it doesn't seem like the feelings are mutual. Despite his efforts to woo her, she won't compltely give him her heart. Why? Is there another guy? Smells like it.

Foreword

Hey there, this is another oneshot twoshot for that dumbbutt friend of mine. HAY SAM, HAY GURR HAY~!! Uh it took me a while to think of something cause I wanted it to be done from a guys point of view and well I don't really use First person that muc so this is all a new experience for me. Regardless I want the same constructive criticism you'd give me if it was my 100th time doing this. Tell me what's wrong so I can fix it, otherwise how will I know if I'm messing up, dah? Dah. With that being said, please enjoy the read and comment/subscribe. Thanks for the time. Good luck and happy writing!

 

BTW: Main image used is not mine. Credit goes to chanqjo.tumblr.com

Spazztastic045
Workin on it! Don't worry, I'll do my best to have it done by Wednesday

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dugong_alkitran
#1
nice story, i loved it. and you even featured my two biases, changjo and sunggyu. :) great job, author-nim. :)
illakim
#2
Probably one of the best Changjo fic here ;)
Spazztastic045 #3
@nona_sj15 Great lol, i knew you'd get it.
@HNsenpai Thanks so much. Glad you liked the read!
-natsukim #4
oh man! i kept smiling when reading! nice two-shots author-nim!
nona_sj15 #5
oh i get it now . it's good loved it more
Spazztastic045 #6
Yeuh mon! @TheHongSister8 Thanks for the feedback! I wanted to keep the celeb status but I didn't want to focus on it cause it wouldn't have done much for the story but yeah, I see what you're gettin at. Thanks for all the help.
@Hypoxia: Great, glad you like. I knooowww I was thinking man, he sounds so feminine. No dude thinks this much and whines this much lol. But I wanted the readers to really get where his mind was and what was going on while he was thinking. I don't usually do romance and specially from a man's POV (it's not very common) so I kinda went into this blind without any real "know how knowledge" I'll get better though. Thanks for the help.
YEEZUS
#7
Let me be cereal here :-))))))
So, wow. I liked it, even though I'm not in favour of one shots this was pretty good. The plot was like what @TheHongSister8 described - it was refreshing to see a man's POV rather than a girl's, but I mean - why would you want to write about sasaengs/reporters in a 1shot that is just way 2 much work and buildup imo L O L
I understand how hard it was to do Changjo's POV because he is a male and what not but it's not impossible, like you did it!!!! Even though his actions/words were kind of feminine, it's okay because he is young and you are young we are all young \m/ but what really got to me was your description of the girl, I really enjoyed that part. I also enjoyed the final chapter, wow @_@ I felt the pang in my chest reading it. THE paAaaaaAiiinIINninoOOh the AgGGggggONnnYyyyyyyyYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYy

hehe i liked it write more peace out girl scout gamja
memeluvr
#8
Plot : I think you have a very good plot here, even if it has been used often, I've yet to see it with these characters, and in this point of view. I didn't read the forward/description, but I could already tell what was going on pretty quickly into the chapter. The fact that the story was in Changjo's pov(which I presume it will be for the entire story) or better yet the fact that the main protagonist seems to be a guy, is something I rarely see in fanfictions, it's refreshing. I also like how you chose to keep the idol's occupations the same, and it makes sense how the female lead is related. One thing I didn't understand, that comes with the use of the "real life scenerio" themes, is how the idols were able to go to a resturant without being followed by sasaengs/reporters and of that sort. But this is a fanfic, so anything is possible. 3.8.5-9/5
(really short because my mom was harrassing me about being an addict to like drugs or smt anyway, I also dont want to sound biased but I think the score was also because it was a one-shot and I don't like those but this was what I wrote right after reading it last night, you did a pretty good job((i couldnt do better ngl)) and I will be looking forward to your stories! Tell me if there's anything else you want reviewed !)
Spazztastic045 #9
@TheHongSister8 : You can write the review here or on my wall, whichever's easier for you. Thanks so much for reading.
@ParkJooEun: Lol aww gee, come on, you're makin me blush XD Thanks so much for the sweet comment, and yeah, I guess I'll wrote my stories like this from now on. Thanks for the read~
evilydia1618
#10
I love all the part of this story, the details, Changjo's feelings.... this is definitely one of the greatest stories here in aff. ;~;
I'm crying of happiness that you, author-nim wrote an awesome story~ <3 Please write more stories like this! :D