They Had To Pay

Description

Luna takes things into her own hands once she sees the bruises on Victoria's skin.

Foreword

 

I had never really liked Jonghyun. He had always seemed too arrogant, too insensitive to me.

My dislike for him augmented the day I spotted the bruises on Victoria. She had been changing in our shared dorm room.

 

“Don’t worry Victoria. I’ll get revenge for you, I promise.”

 


 

This is my entry for Task Two of the Captured Moments competition. The theme was 'revenge'.

This was a difficult to me because I am normally used to writing happy/cute stories, but I wanted to challenge myself. Thus, my first dark/psychological story was born!

Please support me kindly!

[Disclaimer part: The more 'creative' method Luna uses on Jonghyun is not from my own mind, but rather inspired by a scene from the awesome horror visual novel/manga/anime series "Higurashi no Naku Koro ni", from the mind of ryukishi07.]

 

Be warned: It's 4000+ words. :/

tillynilly
WOW just read through this again, and I have quite a few mistakes I ought to fix. I'll do that soon, probably in a few days.

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ILovePikachu2
#1
Chapter 1: Wowwwwww this was very interesting! I loved the unexpected plot twists especially Onew being the and not Jonghyun like damnnnn!

Luna being a serial killer was another thing that was interesting like how she was doing the two murders with good intention but the last murder was pure malicious
Squiggles #2
Chapter 1: Wow, this is really one of the best fics I've read. The plot twist was really unpredictable, and I never guessed that the culprit was who I expected it to be. Plus, that ending was really really impressive. Who would have thought that Luna was such a twisted girl with psychological problems when she has always been viewed as the cheerful, optimistic one? Great story, authornim! I really love this.
wickedpie
#3
Chapter 1: Oh god.................
rapunsyoo
#4
Chapter 1: oh my god....
i love it. when you indicate that Jonghyun is the one who abuse Vic, i really believe it but turned out its Onew.
Then, Luna blame Vic for all the mess.
i love it. good job :)
HoshaTree
#5
Chapter 1: Dark fic! :O Luna is such a badass, and by badass I mean serial killer. Is it wrong that I liked this? hehe
Julettums #6
Chapter 1: .... Oh lord.
lizxxi
#7
Chapter 1: OMG so Luna killed Vic at the end!?!?
I actually thought Luna was nice in this fic when she protected Victoria....
Really liked the ways u described the characters!!!!
-serena
#8
Chapter 1: I love how you describe the murders. It isn't descriptive to the point of boring, and leaves room for imagination. And ugh, it isn't pretty. I unconsciously grabbed my throat when the scene with Jonghyun and the needle played out. Scary. Also, I love how Luna refuses to think of herself as delusional, that she's doing this with good intentions. Damn, I really want to see how Vic gets murdered. Okay, please ignore how creepy I just sounded.
obtainable
#9
Oh wow..