Report Card -  Caged Hopes by  carie159. Oneshot

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Title : (2/2) Was it eye-catching? Does it fit the fic? Would I have clicked on it?

Fits and I probably would have clicked on it. I really adore how it has a much more deeper meaning within it.

Description & Foreword : (2/2) Did it get me curious/interested? Did it give too much information or totally off topic? Was it a proper description and foreword?

Although the description gave away most of the plot, I think it worked nicer this way. Having Daehyun's past in the description rather than showing it through flashbacks, I just think that went well. As for your foreword, I admire your reason for writing this.

Originality: (5/5) Was it different from other fics out there? Were you able to make it your own in a way?

I haven't read much like it.

Overall Appearance/Neatness: (5/5) How were things like your background, poster, and font? Did I have trouble reading due to any font ?

Background was fine, poster is nice, and the font is fine. Although, the poster and background don't really match.

Word Choice & Descriptiveness: (3/6) Did you have a wide range in variety with words? Was I able to visualize things in my head easily with your words?

Nice range of words however, the picture in my head is blurry. Perhaps you could go more in depth with describing things. What does Daehyun look like? Is staying inside his house staring outside the window really all he does? So he doesn't smell from not showering or his colored hair isn't messy, his body isn't sore from sitting there all day, how fast did his body cool down as the house started to flood (?) and etc.

Story Flow: (9/10) Were things going by smoothly or was it confusing and jerky?

Smooth but the second half was a bit of a chop. Just a bit.

Grammar, Sentence Fluency, and etc : (19/20) I’m a semi-grammar freak GRAMMAR NAZI so grammar is a big thing for me. Grammar, spelling, and all the good stuff in this section. Except this part of the grading to be stricter. Seriously.  You will lose big points for this. Keep in mind, that deep within , I am probably a grammar dictator. D-I-C-T-A-T-O-R.

When having dialogue, ' the reporter ... ' is correct, you don't have to capitalize the word The. Some small things that almost went unnoticed.

Plot: (18/20): Very important. Was it interesting? Was it well written? Was I able to get into it or did I start losing interest? Etc.

Well written, but it wasn't all that interesting. I mean I was interested but not a lot.

Writing Style and Format : (19/20) How was the layout/formatting? Was your style easy to figure out and read? How does it look? Was it professional looking? Etc.

Neat, easy to read and professional looking enough.

Overall Enjoyment: (9/10) How much I liked your fic overall.

Total: 88/100

BUT WAIT- THERE’S EXTRA CREDIT~! A CHANCE for more points and also a possibility that more points will get taken off…

Characters: (0/3) Were your characters well developed? Did they have a voice to them?

Not much voice or development.

Chapter Titles: (0/2) Did you even have them? Did they go with the chapter? Were they creative?

My Feels: (0/5) What were my reactions to events? Did you get me to laugh, or crack a smile, resist the urge to throw something at the computer screen, cry, etc? All that good stuff. *Note- Points will be taken off if I ever had any “ What the hell did I just read” moments.

For an angst fic, I wasn't all that sad while reading it. I was more nervous to see what was going to happen to Daehyun.

Twists & Turns + Cliffhangers: (0/2) Did you have them? Were they creative or gasp worthy?

Anything Else: (1/3) Anything else praise worthy or points off?

Beautiful story and admirable reason for writing it.

Notes/ Comments:

As an angst fic, it's suppose to make the read feel down a bit. But I couldn't feel that way when I read it. Yes, Daehyun's family died and that's pretty sad. However, why should I feel sad about it? What if they were mean to him? Or if they weren't, what kind of good things they they do, or just things each member did that made Daehyun miss them so much? I wouldn't know because all I know is that his family is dead and all he does is stare out a window all day. Which I can't feel too bad for. I'm not saying that his family dying isn't sad, I'm saying that you can do more with it all and make it even deeper. *SPOILER ALERT* Also, if Daehyun is still alive by the end, how does that show to never give up? What if Daehyun is still out of it when he's alive and just goes back to what he was before by staring out the window all day? Or did he decide to give life another chance and do his best to be the best person he could be? We'll never know. This is is sequel worthy ;D It's nicely written and whatnot. Maybe a bit too short. Anyways. Good job. Keep up the good work : )

Final Total : 89/100