Title 5

Great title! The title gives the vibe of what your story is going to be about. The title also attracted me at first sight. Good job!

 

Appearance 5

Poster was really well done.

 

Description and Foreword 5

Good foreword. Simple and well done.

 

Plot 20

Wonderful plot! It was obviously well thought out and planned before written.

 

Writing 25

I love your writing. It's really great, including the fact you added philosophy. I did not spot any errors. The was so well written.

 

Characterization 10

Good characterization for a one-shot. The main characters were described wonderfully.

 

Flow 5

Flow is great for a one-shot; not rushed at all. The story is very well-paced.

 

Originality 10

Completely original. Nothing better.

 

Enjoyment 10

I loved this story! It's was a joy reviewing it! 

 

Bonus 5

 

Total: 100/100 

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Note: Great story! I love it. I did not expect I would give such a high grade for my first review but well done!