My Confession to the Moon

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The night Kim Yongsun confessed her feelings to the moon. 

Foreword

Happy 4th Anniversary with Mamamoo!!!

#4withMamamoo

In celebration of their 4th anniv i decided to try writing a moonsun one shot. This is my first moonsun fan fic ans first one shot. I am still thinking if i want to pursue publishing an update on my another story (which only has the prologue) hehe. Anyway, english is not my native lang but i hope i was able to deliver readable content lol.

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Aiyoo16
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What do you think about the confession guys? I am so delusional i hope this will come true. Hahaha. It's just moonsun have the best chemistry ever. Don't you think so? HAHAHAH
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Moon_22 #1
Chapter 1: one of my favorite one shots <3
cjmoo_ #2
Chapter 1: I enjoyed reading this short piece! I like the way you started this story with Yongsun thinking about the hardships she's been through before getting to where she is now. I like this line: 'If there is no opportunities i make my own opportunity.'

The scene of Yongsun and Byul sitting next to each other is simply tender. I like it that they understand each other without saying anything, and it sets the mood and atmosphere right before the confession. I like the buildup to the confession, where they reminisced about their quite bittersweet past. It's so nice to see how Yongsun has grown to like everything about Byul when initially she didn't. It's honestly quite cute to see how frustrated Yongsun was, as if she's going to burst if she didn't let out her feelings towards Byul. Byul's such an understanding person ;-;

That was one kind of a first kiss, and another kind of a second kiss too! Wow. I mean, I could totally understand why Byul's mind was so out of it after the first kiss. The descriptions of their kisses are perfect. Through Yongsun's POV we could see how she really enjoyed the kisses, and took in everything that was happening, such as how Byul tasted. Aww Byul's so cute when she rambled on after the second kiss! It's like she really couldn't believe that it happened to her :')

It's beautiful how at the ending part, Yongsun voiced out her feelings and her raw emotions ;-; My poor heart. She recognised Byul's pure heart in waiting for her all these years.

Just a few things I'd like to point out: It should be 'I' (capitalised) instead of 'i'. Also, the tenses (past/present) are not consistent throughout this story. Nevertheless, I understand that English is not your native language. This is definitely more than readable though, so don't worry about it! Thank you very much for this sweet story!
enavanana #3
Chapter 1: SISTER MY
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