Review for Everlasting Vow
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WHAT YOU WILL BE JUDGED BY:
- Title: Interesting title. Since you have only a few chapters, I can't really say if the title and plot match.
- Poster: I like dark angsty posters, like yours. So I'm expecting a dark storyline from you.
- Plot/Originality: Unfortunately your plot is overused. I don't judge you on this but it's a reminder to maybe next time, you can choose a unique plot. But so far I liked how your story is written.
- Description: Detailed and short. Great!
- Grammar/Spelling/all those essay requirement goodies: Of course everyone has the mistakes but sometime, go back and check.
- How quickly your story goes (or slow!): Good job. Your break in scene was detailed and I liked it :)
ADVICE WILL BE GIVEN
- How to improve writing style: Research things up. It's Seoul University. I'm in America and I don't know how schools and such in Korea is but in America, college 'principals' are called chancellors. And changing your grades is against the law- illegal. So I think being stuck in jail would be the bigger problem than getting expelled.
- Grammar/spelling mistakes: As I said earlier ^^
- Tips to make the story flow easier: NA
- Any questions you need answered!
Addition Comments: I like your story, so I subscribed. I rarely go on, since I do have a life outside my computer but anytime I get a chance to go on, I'll check your fanfic out! Like I said, there are some things you should research before writing. I also really like how your antagonists (The Populars) were full of people I would never expect to be mean. Even in my fics, your chosen Populars are the nice conservative ones.
That is all! Keep up the good work!
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