[P] Out Of Tune (by exoskies)
Description
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I, in any way, do not own the story. It was purely made by exoskies alone. This is just for proofreading purposes only. This is proofread by FarisAllison.
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PROOFREADER'S NOTES
Comments:
- The story does not have any critical grammar error. Some are perfect and others just need to reconsider the sentence structure.
- The story is great but I think some of the words are wrongly used. For instance, ‘riffs’ is actually describing a relaxing sound, especially jazz and blues. Some of the terms might need a reference to the dictionary or the Internet.
- I find that the character’s thoughts are expressed in the story and you might want to use ‘….’ to be able to discern them from the dialogue as well as the narrative sentences which describe the story.
- Overall, the grammar’s great. Just be careful with the usage of words especially terms that are foreign to you.
Foreword
DESCRIPTION
There is only one thing that Kyungsoo hates more than rock concerts - obnoxious punk rock vocalists. Unfortunately, thanks to his best friend Minseok, Kyungsoo is able to experience both of those things in one night. And that's how his life turns upside down because the said vocalist wants to prove him that music doesn't end with on Chopin.
FOREWORD
The lights dimmed and the first sharp blast of electric guitar riffsfiltered through the overcrowdedstuffy concert hall. Kyungsoo was certain that his eardrums had just been burst as the crowds went into a screaming frenzy which only further intensified once the vocalist appeared on the stage. He was a tall guy in a black leather jacket. His hair was blond, tousled and fashionably shaved at the sides.
“We’re The Rush!” He shouted and began singing to the overly aggressive tune of the fast beats of drums, jerky bass line and the hardcore thrummingscratchy guitar riffs.
Kyungsoo decided that the music was absolutely dreadful. Chaotic and rowdy. He hated it and concluded that the band should have called themselves The Rash for their music was irritating to his ears.
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