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ending in five senses-  uniquestel

Notes reviewer: indiankpopelsa (poster not done by us) so sorry for the late delivery, i forgot to give this to floras for her to post - xing   ☨Title ( 15/15) The title was not relevant to me at first as I thought this was ONE fanfiction. But later as I read the second chapter it was similar to a shoutout to the orginal fanfiction, which was named “The Seventh Sense-Open your Eyes”. You bought in the Five senses of Hear, Touch, Sight, Smell, Taste. Ending in Five Senses showed that something is ending somewhere and it involved Five Senses. It was Tragedy, Angst, Catchy, Short and Sweet. So, perfect! It gave a introduction to your fanfiction, quite well, even thought you planned that, this was an end to a one-shot. The title was relevant to a one shot. So, no problems there.
☨Description and Foreword (20/20)
the Foreword was short and direct. The phrase in between the characters showed a submissive yet regretful tone. Because of oneself he/she lost something dear. Wanting to do something but not able to because of oneself. These were impressions I got from the introduction. I did not find any flaws around that area, so you’re good till now ^^
☨Plot (14/20) 
Here, you need to make very slight changes. First off, the Font. The font you used is mostly used for comic fictions and it does not match with the genre. So the font does not feel comfortable being around in such a kind of atmosphere. It was absolutely cute and it displays the immersed feelings of a boy. The boy seems to be really ‘obssessed’ with this girl. Not love. How he feels her is not how normal boys feel. Its way wider and way too much. He loves her quite a lot. I can understand that. A