인어의 눈물 (Baby, Don’t Cry)
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인어의 눈물 (Baby, Don’t Cry)
BY RYEONA
MAIN CHARACTERS: SEHUN & JOY
GENRE:ROMANCE
STATUS: COMPLETED
DESCRIPTION OF STORY: SE HUN BELIEVES IN REINCARNATION. THROUGH HIS DREAMS HE DISCOVERED HE MADE A FATAL MISTAKE. NOW HAUNTED, HE SEARCHES FOR THE GIRL IN HIS DREAMS.
REQUESTED BY: RYEONA
REVIEWED BY: PURPLECHEEZE
>> STORY LINK HERE
GENRE:ROMANCE
STATUS: COMPLETED
DESCRIPTION OF STORY: SE HUN BELIEVES IN REINCARNATION. THROUGH HIS DREAMS HE DISCOVERED HE MADE A FATAL MISTAKE. NOW HAUNTED, HE SEARCHES FOR THE GIRL IN HIS DREAMS.
REQUESTED BY: RYEONA
REVIEWED BY: PURPLECHEEZE
>> STORY LINK HERE
title of the story: 3/5
In all honesty I didn't like the title for some reason. But since I know - and love - the song you based this on, I can see how the title fits the story.
description & foreword: 5/5
I love the description. I thought it wasn't too vague, and it still gives enough information. It caught my attention as soon as I read it. It easily intrigued me to read it.
appearance: 3/5
The poster admittedly didn't impress me, but I can easily see how it relates to the story. Plus I think you should minimize the Jimin a bit. On mobile version, I was surprised and a bit confused as to why Jimin's pic was so big until I realized it was a shop banner.
flow: 5/5
I thought the flow was great. The transition between the scenes and everything.
originality of plot: 3.5/5
As much as I love the story, I do know that the song gave you the plot. But it still is rare to find such plots for fanfics, and plus you add in your own elements to it - with the reincarnation and all.
gammar & spelling: 4/5
I didn't find any major grammar errors. But I did find some sentences sounding a bit rocky. Maybe it just needs a bit revision.
characters: 3/5
I couldn't really relate to the character's emotions since you mostly described what they did rather than how they felt. Sehun's character did seem a bit bland, admittedly due to that. I can somewhat tell of Joy's pain even though her name was never really mentioned. But I find the characters do lack emotions here.
overall enjoyment: 4/ 5
Like I mentioned, I really really like the story. When I first heard the song, I instantly knew I had to write a story based on it. But I never got to it, and I never found a fic using this idea. Well, at least, a well written one. I'm glad you wrote this, and I'm glad you didn't extend the ending even further. I thought it was a good place to stop, and leave the readers to imagine the rest.
total grade: 76 / 100
AUTHOR'S NOTE: I hoped you find the review helpful in any way possible. Thank you for reqesting.
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