In your foreword, the sentence "It doesn't matter how many people want that human alive" seems albeit weird to me. This sentence seem to be supporting the previous mentioned sentence, and thus contrast with the following sentence.At first when i read the foreword, i thought you meant: If no one cares or loves Jongin, no matter how much a certain someone wants him to be alive(without loving him or caring about him), he will just end his life for once and for all. However your following sentence(remember this is what i first thought) is trying to tell me just one person that wants him to be alive will save him(which definitely doesn't match the previous sentence) and this makes me go confuse. I have to read it a few more times to get what you meant
However the chapter turned out to be real good! I just hope thatyou could take away the last scenario (last 4 paragrapgh) since i guess it would be more dramatic and gives us an empty feeling.
(I have to admit I cried)
I hope you dont get mad if i seemed to be criticizing you too much since i can assure you i can't write half as well as you did. Good luck on the contest though!
Chapter 1: This was so good! I like how it was developed. When I got to "I will never leave your side", I thought that maybe there would be a happy ending. but of course not T.T
Chapter 1: So depressing!v(ಥ ̯ ಥ)v
But this fic is really beautiful though, I'll be waiting for the side story.
Oooh and maybe you can write an epilogue with a happier ending, like kaisoo reuniting in heaven or somethingo(^▽^)o
Chapter 1: Y-You made me cry T____T
that was so beautiful :'( K-Kyunggie pllease come back. Oh! my poor heart can't handle the angst in here </3
that was so beautifully written, thank you so much author nim :D
*goes to a corner and continue crying*
Chapter 1: Waaaah it's too saaad T^T The way the backstory was written is great. I can feel how kyung and jongin became really close and i felt kinda sad about their secret place being turned into something :((( I was hoping for a happy ending but I saw 'tragedy' in the tags. Lol. Hoping you would write something as great as this one. But with more fluffier ending XD I'm not that fond of reading tragic stories eh. HAHAHA didn't regret reading it tho. Thank you for introducing this story to me ^^
H-hold on a sec!!!!!!!! Why are you asking me if it's good?? I mean Wow i feel honored :') i feel like a kaisoo teacher xD Sarangheyo too cutiepie , will start reading it :D
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