Review by hikikomori 

TITLE: 10/10
it fits the story perfectly, and the descriptions of the flowers and such gives it power.
APPEARANCE: 5/5
right off the bat it looks great! the font is not too flashy, nor the colors, and it's very easy to read. plus the poster and background are very pleasing to the eye.
DESCRIPTION: 15/15
before reading your story, the description is great! it summarizes with a small foreshadow, and doesn't give too much information. after reading the story, it's still a great description, though we don't really know if 'the other [relented]' but it is clear who is who.
FOREWORD: 13/15
before reading your story, the first thing i notice is that your foreword is super long. it's longer than the actual story. having long forewords is a little bit of a turnoff (for me) because i want to just take a peek at the story to see if i might want to read it later. when i read it, though, it was very well written! the last sentence/paragraph actually gave me goosebumps orz. just watch out, you have some of her dialogues split into two paragraphs, and that can become confusing. generally, you would keep to one paragraph per person, of if the dialogue splits into two paragraphs then don't put a quotation mark at the end and then another at the beginning: (ex. text)
"And when I look into the water, I see nothing but peace. I do not see fear like you do, I do not see death or struggle. I see the slow-moving waves and the gentle way it removes life out of the body.
"Wasn't it you who once told me to only be afraid of what hurts me?"
after reading, i still think it's a little long, but it's necessary. it's a great way to introduce the story.
CHARACTERIZATION: 8/10
i know it is a drabble, and so it has to be short, but between the foreword and the final you displayed some great character development. my only complaint is that we don't really see the change in niel's state of mind on the matter, only see the beginning and end (amie's is pretty clear).
GRAMMAR: 7.5/10
you shift in and out of past and present tense. in the final, you have to make sure that the beginning, because it is in the present, or the most present, it should be in present tense and the part in the hospital should be in past. stay consistent!
SPELLING: 5/5
i didn't see any mistakes.
ORIGINALITY: 3/5
eh, i've seen it before.
PLOT: 13/15
it's very focused, good job! my complaint is that it is kind of cliché, which always bothers me. i also don't think that the foreword and final really *connect* but they fit together, do you see where i'm going? they are kind of random situations of their relationship put together. it would have been a lot better in the foreword if they were in a hospital but you described how she was still fairly healthy, maybe foreshadowed by saying that the IV drip was full ,and then in the end it's empty; that would be a good foreshadowing element.
FLOW: 5/10
the tense shifts were really annoying and distracting.
TOTAL: 84.5/100

Author's Note:

After this review, I went back and fixed those misplaced quotations in the foreword :D But I didn't change the tense or flow of the story. Thanks to this review, I understand now that my way of tackling the story is a bit uncommon. 

Link to story:

Of Sunflowers and Blood Red Poppies