Today in Dutch classes, we were talking about Haiku's. (Poems with 5,7,5, syllables)
I wanted to try but... I don't think it's that good. I mean, my haiku's don't look like poems to me!
 

So... I wanted to put them here, maybe someone here can help me and say what's wrong?

I tried to make haiku's about '10080' and '86400', cause when I read this stories, I had to cry! (But who didn't cry? ;__;)
I don't own this stories!
All rights go to Dyongoo and EXObubz...

Oh and warning: my english is baaaaaaaaaaad :D

10080

Give me one week, please
one week pretending that you
still love me, giant

                                                       - Byun Baekhyun

86400

It took me one day,
but now I know that you are
the most important
 
                                                          -Park Chanyeol

I also have a Dutch version:

10080

Een week is alles
wat ik van je vraag, giant
één week, hou van mij

                                          -Byun Baekhyun

86400:

één dag kostte het
maar nu weet ik wie voor mij
het belangrijkst is

                                        -Park Chanyeol

So please, comment and tell me what I'm doing wrong! Thanx ♥
xx Elviri