Pedomato's Examples c:!!! ;

Note: This is not a real story.

Name of fanfiction: My Ex's Wedding.

Rating of Forward: 5/10

You have an excellent foreward, but I don't really think it reflects on your story. Remember if you're doing a wedding themed foreward, make it have a couple of wedding pictures (make it look neat) and decorations that'll reflect on your story. The whole rainbow colored decorations does not fit the whole idea of a wedding if you really think about it.

Rating of Grammar: 3/15

I understand that English is not your first language, but please use quotation marks " " when you're using dialouge. Please don't use hyphens - for dialouge. Also, use your commas BEFORE you're conjunctions to make your sentence flow much better. You have simple sentences which are corect, but the others have HORRIBLE grammer. Sorry :c

Is it eye catching?: 6/10

Your story is eyecatching, however, your background is a little too busy for your story. I recommend using a solid color with pretty font texts for your background! Your poster is absolutely beautiful! It definitely reflects on how your story is going to be about, and is created beautifully. Nice job!

Was it something you expected?: So-so

After reading the fifth chapter, the story kind of got cheesy and predictable where the main character fell in love with her best friend. If you want your fanfiction to be more exciting, I suggest a plot twist maybe something like the main character will try to kill the bride/groom? Lol, that's just me.

Did you like it?: It's alright

The plot is alright, considering the fact that there's a lot of stories very similar to this one. To be honest, I wouldn't want to finish it. Sorry!

Grade (0/100): 51%

Comments:

-I consider you to revise at some parts of your story.

-Try to make a plot twist!

-Maybe add more characters?

-Change the background into something more simple c:

-Change your foreward x.x

-Try to use a grammer/spelling check.

~Pedomato