Title: 4/5

I know why it's called fated, but there were some parts that I got confused with the title. However, nice job! 

Foreword: 7/10

Your foreword is okay. I like the way you told your intro. Nice! I was just wondering why you put Taecyeon first than Tiffany. I thought Tiffany was the main character?   

Appearance: 4/5

Nice poster!

Plot: 13/15

Your plot is very simple, but I like the surprising parts that you add. It gives a nice touch.

Originality: 13/15

I have read a few fanfics like this already, so I guess there's nothing much to say.

Grammar & Spelling: 17/20

I've seen punctation mistakes like your other fanfics. Like I said again, try avoiding those. 

Flow: 10/10

The flow was well.

Characterization: 8/10

You put a character profile. You're revealing too much.

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10

I lost interest in the middle a bit, but I loved the beginning and the end.