What to tell you hmmm.... How many stories do you have running? I mean there are ways that people use to get more readers and stuff but most of the time kids on here like the cliche stuff. I would suggest maybe getting your story reviewed. That way you will have a better idea of what you do well and what you need to improve on plus people will gain interest if they see the review from the shop. That's just an idea but don't beat yourself up because the popular people don't become popular in a flash, usually it's a gradual thing :)