Hope Is A Dream That Doesn't Sleep~ l Pickup For AmySuju
[ Song HyeJin] I AM SOOOO SORRY THAT I WOOK SO LONG WITH YOUR REQUEST!! T^T Finals are coming up and I am swamped~ Thank you for your patience though!
Title: [ 8 / 10 ]
The title is mediocre to say that least. It is catchy, in the sense that I want to read the foreword. But, instead, make it so that we want to not only read the foreword, but also the rest of the stroy. The reason behind the 8 is because it was not that enthusiastic. It needs to be dark, or simple. Something that invokes a sense of curiosity.
Graphics: [ 10 / 10 ]
Okay, first off, THIS IS SOOOO MUCH BETTER!!! I love THIS graphic. So much better than the last one. This one captures the essence of the main characters, and who they really are in your story. There is no need to explain the 10 out of 10, right?
Description and Forward: [ 12 / 15 ]
The description is very short and sweet. It leaves on a cliff hanger, making people want to scroll down. The foreword was really good as well. I love the note idea! So clever and witty. At the end, though, it gets very.....colorful. Sure, colors catch the eyes of people, but at times, it can get sort of redundant. Repetitive, and not so appealing. Stick to a light grey or something, and only color the words that you need to. I am awarding you a 12 out of 15 due to that little mishap at the end.
Characterization: [ 9 / 10 ]
These characters where put together really well. You could tell who they were, and what part of they story they fit into. I gave you a 9 because it was....sort of rushed. I think. I like it when the characters are throughly introduced, with a bit of mystery as to why they are there.
Plot: [ 7 / 10 ]
The plot, it was....okay. I did feel as if I was reading a regular love story, which is sweet, don't get me wrong. I love redundant love stories. But, the whole flower shop thing at the beginning made me laugh a little. A 7 out of 10 for this due to the lack of creativity.
Flow: [ 10 / 10 ]
The flow was great. You stuck to it, and keep with it. I have no other comments bside a 10 out of 10! Yay!
Grammar and Spelling: [ 16 / 25 ]
Your grammar is alright. I had to look past the fact that you speak broken English, therefore, type broken English as well. Yuo requested that I put some speeling mistakes:
" . . . 'Yes mother, im late but im late because I buy these flowers for you' . . . "
" . . . 'Yes mother, I'm late but, I'm late because I bought these flowers for you' . . . "
" . . . 'Yes mother, I'm late but, I'm late because I bought these flowers for you' . . . "
" . . .The next morning, three of them is now infront of Donghae's florist . . . "
" . . .The next morning the three of them were in front of Donghae's floral shop . . . "
There are many others, but I am in no time to list them all.....Sorry!
Bonus: [ 10 / 10 ]
Much better this time!!!
Comments:
Thank you so much for your request!! Please request from me another time!!
Score: 82 / 100
Percentage Grade:
B - 80-90
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