Help, pretty please?

Hey there! I am co-authoring a fic called "Parachute" here on AFF with my good partner ImWickedBaby. Gee, this sounds like shameless advertising.

To get straight to the point, I am in charge of the writing department while my partner is the editor. I specialize in angst and drama, but not much else :(. So...I'm not good at coming up with fluff or fillers.

And it's not cool at all when I ask for help and ImWickedBaby goes "Lets just kill Haneul and reincarnate him as a banana."

So I want to ask you all, if you have time, to read our first two chapters and suggest anything for future chapters? Please don't go correcting the existing chapters because we were thinking of editing them anyway. We already have the and ending figured out, so just a little drama and fillers would be very beneficial :)

Thank you guys so much! Here's the link:

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/214510/parachute-heechul-sment-supermanager-ocs-exomanager

Please comment on this post for any suggestions!

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Chullys #1 Jul 17, 2012 19:29:12

I'll ill damn autocorrect eurrgghhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!

Chullys #2 Jul 17, 2012 19:27:50

Hmmmm... You could have a whole apartment problem, where he can't stay there and has to be at the dorms for longer? But expand on it or something. Or have some kind of crazy fan go hyper obsessive over Haneul? Or make him fall I'll again randomly? Or... Make a female character that really likes him, and doesn't realise he is gay, or she does but she doesn't care and thinks she can change him? LOOOLLLL... Or... Perhaps he could be teased and kinda bullied by some of the SM artists? Or Heebum goes missing and Haneul finds him? Or... Kyuhyun and Haneul have sme kind of massive game tournament... LOL man, you could do absolutely anything!!! I've just got too many random ideas hahaha xD.. Ermm... I could carry in listing, but you probably get the idea xD... Have fun!!!!!!!!

amusuk #3 Jul 17, 2012 06:13:10

since i lack of any skill to spot something nor suggestion i'm sorry..
But i just love reading fic anyway^^