►Title: 3/5◄

Your title fits very nicely! I assume that Eli will be wanting to protect Kevin when the plot progresses, so it makes perfect sense. However, it's very bland. It's something I would just skip over when browsing recent stories.

►Characters (Depends if they follow their roles completely): 5/5◄

It's still way too early to tell if your characters stay consistent in their roles. But, you have some good character interaction going on and it's nice to develop relationships in the first chapter, which is what you're doing. The interactions are cute, too ^__^

►Description and foreward: 22/25◄

(I count this big because it's the first thing that grabs my attention)

I really have no complaints here. I really liked them both! I think that they should have been switched, though... But that's probably just me ^__^

►Poster/Banner/BG/whatever: 8/10◄

(Of course it has to suit the story >>)

The poster looks good, and it fits with the story. But there's none of the characters on it! You've said that you've put in a request, though? I didn't dock you very much on it.

►Originality: 2/5◄

(Have I seen this before?)

The gang thing is overdone. Sorry, but that's the truth. This story is kind of looking like West Side Story, except Kevin isn't part of a rival gang (I think).

Since it's too early to really have any unique touches, you're lacking in this right now >.>

► Grammar: 8/10◄

(Do you describe scense well?)

You're descriptions are good! When you do them... Instead of giving us a photo link, you should describe what Mi-Cha looks like with your words! Same with Kevin's new haircut. Instead of saying; “It's his Neverland hairstyle,” describe it! If you do it well enough, people will be able to tell what hair style it is.

Also, you may have some readers that are not familiar with Neverland. Or people who are not fans of U-KISS, that are reading your story. Putting that there will just confuse them.

You can do descriptions just fine. They are really good! You've really painted a picture in my head, so far. Especially with Mi-Cha's room (monstrosity), and the mall scene.

►Writing style: 10/10◄

(Do you have cliff-hangers that make your subbies want more? Or moment in the story where they love?)

It looks promising. Can't say too much here, because a lot of stories look very very hopeful at the beginning, then just drag on and on way past when they should have ended. Please don't do that with your story :)

I like your style, though. It's something I would want to read more of...

►Flow: 10/10◄

(If your story doesn't match your plot, it'll piss me off and are you working the story too fast?)

Ummm... Not much to grade here, so far. XD I'll just give you these points.

► Overall enjoyment: 15/20◄

To be honest; I'm not a huge fan of ElVin. So... I don't like where this is heading >.> But, I LOVE 2Shin, so I do like where this is heading...

Anyway, the point is; It's not exactly my cup of tea, but I will read anything with 2Shin in it XD

I must say, though, the SooVin was kind of cute, though :3

►Bonus: 4/5◄

You have a good start here! Keep going~ And don't make it too dramatic! Too much drama causes people to stop being interested in a story :)

►Overall grade: 87/105 ◄