I just found this. And I think you're a very, very intelligent writer (although, I just discovered you). You might (honestly, you already did in a way) make it into my list of favorite fanfic writers.



Nonetheless, I'd recommend using color to represent the speaker (pink for Irene, yellow for Seulgi, etc.) whenever they're talking over each other; it'd make it a more pungent experience for the reader, knowing already the semiotic interpretation of such colors within the fandom.



Something that I've played with, - not on this site, not under this username, - is to put myself a series of restrictions or goals while writing (take some emotions and paint it all over the pages, - or stop using a series of particular words, e. g. adverbs ending in -ly, - or to create the illusion of tension, to make others feel breathless with short, very short sentences).



Run.



No.



No...


In short, take an idea, an image, and make us feel it, see it, or take a thought, a feeling and make us see or hear it, - it can take as many or as little words as you'd like. Use music, - create the music with words, - like poetry.



Or make people spiral with ideas...



You can also always choose a core (philosophical) concept, something to write around and about, - a sort of thematic skeleton. For instance, if you like comics, you might have noticed that some heroes are the archetypal representation of a concept; and they seem to be always fighting their direct opposite. Batman is Order, the Joker is Anarchy, - and because there exists one, there rises its opposite. One cannot exist without the other, - yet one destroys the other.



If you don't enjoy that idea, you could always research about Semiotics and use it to your advantage, - sow a mystery with colors and symbolism, your readers will pluck the results and build a plot for the story in their minds.



Or a plotless story...



Maybe heavy social commentary... with images and colors, and characters that seem more alive than ourselves.



You should check out Greyella's work (on Fanfiction(dot)net). She's a wonderful wordsmith, - and might give you some (experimental) inspiration. Or even Pynchon and his verbatim... or a few pages of Finnegans Wake and ia Woolf.



Or make it a mathematical experience.



This might be the worst advice you've ever received (you might've already known or used or hated all of these things I wrote about). But... I thought, why not? I lose nothing.

Aha! This is awakening my literature nerd side. Frankly speaking, both techniques have their places in the world of prose and poetry. They are only limited by the skill and sensitivity of the writer- which you’ve done well with! Everything else is really left up to taste. I’ve noticed that you have a tendency to create very dense text, sensory and plot-wise. With the exception of some parts of that historical fantasy Seulrene romance that you did (hella angsty). I wonder if you’d be willing to try something very minimalistic, perhaps even experiment with visual placement of the words on the space? Lol. I was a very experimental writer in uni (back when I still did prose and whatnot) and even incorporated elements such as altered manga pages, etc.

Just suggestions! Be adventurous. :)

The first one is fine. But there are times that I'd want the stuff to be left to my imagination. Maybe there are times where those will help but I think there are times where it would just kill the immersion. Let's give it a try though.

The second idea can be very useful because there are times where it can get confusing about who's who (Seoul City Vice on the first few chapters, and I don't know you... When they're having short exchanges) often's was good. You should do it more. I've yet to read sunrise drive so I can't really give my opinion on that.