What does this sentence makes you expect ?

Hello!

"Whatever doesn't kill me, better run."

For my story I have put a motto for the two main but I start to think some readers (well I assume because of one reviewer thought that way so I believ other readers did expect that too) just thought it was some badass line to say and there just for the aesthetic, what I intended to, in a 'subtle' way reveal how that character just doesn't give up easily and fights until the end, without necessarily making her a psycopath who would kill without a single doubt.

Do you think I should change the wording or the sentence itself? Thoughts?

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taempteng #1
The first thing I thought was, “Someone better not piss off this person lest they want their heads rolling.”

But, since you said it yourself that it’s suppose to show how the person doesn’t give up easily, then I guess it works too. We’re not the authors, we don’t control the story and we don’t know the meaning behind every quotes. But that’s the thing about being a reader — we have to see beyond the surface, find what else is hidden behind the sentence and see in between lines.

I don’t think you should change the sentence, especially if you think it fits your story. But, then again, like I said, you’re the writer. You do the final decisions, we just give you an opinion, don’t mind us. :)
suchentao #2
From the statement, I imagine whoever says it is going to try to kill other people? Is this a revenge quote? :O
ann1914 #3
At first I thought of the quote as being a part of a revenge plot of some kind. Your explanation of what you intend to do with it sounds good too though. I guess you placed this at the front of your story? I don't think you need to change it if it fits your plot (the mysteriousness is a nice touch). If you can make your readers guess its meaning, that's a good sign (personally speaking). Then you can further delve into the meaning of the quote as you unfold the story.
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