1. Viewing comfort (how pleasing to the eye is the story layout): Make readable is my default setting so I suppose the layout is good and pleasing to the eye.

2. Title: It sounds like it came from a song's lyrics but it's good. The title itself makes one think that this is going to be an angst fic.

3. Plot (originality): Thoughtfully original. There are a lot of fics like this but it gives you a feeling of freshness and it reminds you of summer /amidst of the winter in the story's plot/.

4. Plot Development: It's calming really. It showed the upside and the downside things of being with a man like Minseok. Everything is perfect although you should have had given a backstory onto why Minseok is a tiny bit different.

5. Characterizations: Minseok is usually portrayed as the dude who eats a lot or has eating disorder but this one is unique since he's very childlike /not really/, he's not really incapable but is almost there which gives the readers a little hope. Meanwhile, Luhan here reminds me of those parents who supports their child even if they are disabled or something, he's really Minseok's hero.

6. Ending: It's breathtaking really, one would think that Luhan would give up on him but instead stayed by his side and continued loving him. Minseok is beautiful in every sense and even if his mind is being occupied by a lot of things, it seems like Luhan would always be that a lot of things.

WRITTEN REVIEW:
Favorite thing about story: As a masochist to my bias, I really like the scene where Luhan spewed too many which broke Minseok's fragile, little heart and went to the freezing cold outside.

Least favorite thing about story: I love every bits of this story, no flowery statements needed.

One thing that stuck with you (or one thing that didn't): Minseok is curled up into a ball at the foot of their apartment building, rocking himself back and forth as he shivers. He hasn’t left home at all; he’s just been asking for Luhan’s permission to come back in. this part and the next sentences that followed. My heart broke just as how Luhan's heart was smashed. It should take comfort Luhan that Minseok /kinda/ forget the reason why he's out there but it made him more sad and guilty because Minseok is being fed by his brain with lies.