Ooh, I hope there's going to be more drama/twists soon.. like (______) caught Myungsoo on doing something bad behind her back, maybe? Idk, I was just blasting my idea out there cuz I like those kinds of twists. ;p Haha anyways, great story please update soon~! ^^
It seems that Myungsoo is slowly falling for her. That's why he can't get her out of his head now. Myungsoo really is taking his role as her boyfriend seriously. It's his second time standing up for her. He can be scary-looking when he's angry, which is why he's able to intimidate them. By taking the time to bond with her, it'd help the two develop the chemistry that they need to appear convincing as a couple. This way there won't be any more awkwardness between them. Woohyun looks jealous seeing the two acting couple-like. There's the possibility of a love triangle between them later.
No problem! I'm glad that you find that helpful. It should be an "i" in place of the "a." There seems to be a little improvement in your grammar now from what I'm seeing.
You walked out of class with Nicole, heading to your locker.
Correction: You walked out of class with Nicole and head over to your locker.
Someone called, it was Myungsoo.
Correction: Someone called. It was Myungsoo.
You told him, it was awkward as the three of you entered the cafeteria, everyone stopped whatever they were doing, staring at the new couple and a extra student.
Correction: You told him. It was awkward as the three of you entered the cafeteria. Everyone stopped whatever they were doing and stared at the new couple with an extra student.
Someone commented and everyone burst out laughing, you grew red and clutched onto Nicole's arm.
Correction: Someone commented and everyone burst out laughing. You turned red and clutched onto Nicole's arm.
Myungsoo boombed, causing everyone who to quieten down immediately,
Correction: Myungsoo boomed, causing everyone to quiet down immediately.
Whoever dares to make-fun, gossip or even stare at my baby...
Correction: make fun of
Myungsoo looked at you and winked, "I'll dig your eyes and rip your mouth off your face arraso?!"
Correction: Myungsoo looked at you and winked. "I'll dig your eyes out and rip your mouth off of your face, arraso?!"
Myungsoo walked into room 239, he didn't bother going to class, he was going to graduate with 'flying colours' anyway.
Correction: Myungsoo walked into room 239. He didn't bother going to class because he knew that he was going to graduate with "flying colours" anyway.
* Sentences beginning with a different subject are best writter separately so that it won't end up as a run-on. I already know that's a different way of spelling "color," the American English version of it.
Myungsoo stepped into the room to see Infinite scattered around the room- Sungyeol and Sungjong were playing wii. Hoya, Dongwoo and Sunggyu were playing cards and Woohyun sitting on the couch, silently.
Correction: Myungsoo stepped into the room to see Infinite scattered around the room. Sungyeol and Sungjong were playing with the Wii. Hoya, Dongwoo and Sunggyu were playing with cards while Woohyun was sitting on the couch silently.
Sungjong tossed his wii remote away which hit Sunggyu on the head and sprinted to Myungsoo, pouncing on him.
Correction: Sungjong tossed his Wii remote away, which hit Sunggyu on the head, and sprinted over to Myungsoo to pounce on him.
Sungjong-ah, i'm not gay.
Correction: I'm
* The pronoun "I" is always capitalized no matter where it is in the sentence.
Woohyun blurted. Causing Infinite to widen their eyes at his sudden outburst.
Correction: Woohyun blurted out, causing Infinite to widen their eyes at his sudden outburst.
Woohyun rubbed the back of his head, letting a awkward chuckle slip out of his mouth.
* The definite article before "awkward" should be "an."
Myungsoo explained everything, from his mother arranging a marridge for him and until where he protected you.
Correction: Myungsoo explained everything from his mother arranging a marridge for him to when he protected you.
*She's always been on my lately...*
* The noun "mind" should be added after the possessive adjective "my."
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