Title: "Behind the Porcelain Mask"
Author: JustDerpin
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Title ☆ (5/5)
I really like the title. It’s something different and refreshing to see here on Asianfanfics. I’d definitely click if I saw this floating around the site.

Foreword & Description ☆ (6.5/10)
The foreword and the description is pretty good. There were a few spelling mistakes but that’s nothing an editing session can’t fix.

‘Just Because my eyes don’t tear, doresn’t mean my heart doesn’t cry.’ should be: ‘Just because my eyes don’t tear, doesn’t mean my heart doesn’t cry.’

I’m not usually fond of profile character unless it’s really needed but I’m glad you didn’t reveal too much trivial information about the characters.

Appearance (Posters/Backgrounds/Banners) ☆  (10/10)
I love the poster and the background, it looks really well-made.


Originality & Creativity ☆  (6.5/10)
Since this story was for a contest and you chose the prompts, I reviewed on the basis of how well you expressed the prompts through your writing and the story overall. I like how all the prompts you chose linked and tied in together with each other with the theme of a mask or hiding behind a mask. Good job to you for seeing the connection between the prompts. Although the connecting prompts was good, it seemed that the way you expressed them through the story was still kind of lacking. Perhaps if you had a stronger plot, it would have been much better.
 

Plot ☆ (15/20)
As for the plot, I felt that it lacked in more depth. You have this story tagged as angst; to be honest, this story isn’t angst at all. I’m not entirely sure which genre this story would come under but I’d say it’s more of drama rather than angst. I was hoping that you expanded more on what ha