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Guardian of A Lantern // A Unique Review ShopTitle : 4.5/5
I understand that this story revolves around the piano man which gives out the mystery vibe but it's just too direct,maybe you can twist it a little bit. Since they shared the same interest which is the piano and the beautiful notes, in my preference you relate it just to be more creative...but overall it's great!
Graphics : 5/5
The main poster is pretty but the font is so bold that it almost takes the mystery vibe off but the side poster is beautiful and fits the angst-romance theme you set. Love the sentimental value in the main poster though~Owh and I didn't watch the video because I didn't want to bother my brother.
Description : 10/10
The description was on point but for Yoona's, I think it does not quite fit when you said that everyone believes she's perfect when they actually gave her nickname. It's just that in my opinion, perfect means you're lovable and such.
Plot : 23/25
The plot has what it takes to be a good plot. The was intense and it's your story so I don't think I deserve to say too much but it's my opinion and there was a teeny-weeny part of the story that I kind of hesitating.The alternate ending is...should I say a safer choice?
Characters : 25/25
You really describe the characters well and put me in the mood. It doesn't need those lengthy sentences but just a few simple words and comparison between each characters shows their distinct personality which is great.
Grammar : 17/20
Nope, I'm not the grammar Nazi but I suggest you to re-check your story for some sentences got me confused and there were typos,just a small part.The construction of your sentences is well done but sometimes it made me read the same paragraph twice and sometimes thrice. There's a part that made me wonders who's your appointing to but re-reading it, I see it, the perfectness of your sentence and the weird me.
Enjoyment : 8/10
I personally love this story and both of the endings. This is why I just love reading other people stories because there are tonnes of stories and for me to read one by one is hard. I prefer it if you merge both of the endings into one. I love that the original ending never lets the mystery and angst vibe off the hook and the alternative ending is quite off the trail but it's a happy one, and everyone loves happy ending but for this story...I don't know. You really pinned the idea on giving the story the fairytale mood but the common thing between the two was that something was missing like her friends reaction or what about his family, yet both of them are the perfect ending.I just thought that it's better if you let Yoona guess her relationship with Junsu for the alternative ending, making the reader guess a lil bit.
TOTAL : 92.5 % (Still an A+...^^)
Others : This story is quite slow but it have a pace and each chapter still serves it purposes and you wrote it very well. Not that I hate the comparison you made with other things (e.g; generator) but just lessen it a bit because it disturbs me, somehow. Just my opinion, no hard feelings because who knows somebody will actually love it. All in all this is such a great story. Good luck with your entry~!
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