Chapter 1: I ;o\\love your story. Although Baek and Yeol relationship seem rocky from the start,they managed to overcome them and poor Kris. If only Yeol didn't came back, Baek would be his.
I love this so much. This is so different... in fact, all your stories are so different from one another, and I have the impression that you even choose different kinds of words accordingly (don't know if you do that purposely or just naturally). This was above all very sweet.
It reminded me so much of my teens, and the fact that I used to listen to the same bands helped that XD Dream Theater, Megadeth and the Nightfall album hahahah that was what my teens were like! It surprised me actually, and then the Silmarillion reference appeared, and I was so excited because it was my favorite book during my middle high school years... (It was my second time having a favorite book in my life so it hold a very special place within me...)
When Baekhyun told Chanyeol the drawing was of him, I let out a high pitched scream I wasn't aware I was capable of haha, these kids are so sweet.
I liked the narration style, the, how is this called, I don't know, pace? It had a nice pace. Suited the length of the sory. Also I always like your dialogues, because they're brief and good. It's somehow nice to hear them speak so little, while we are guessing so much about their personalities and minds from the description of their acts and gestures. Maybe that's why I liked the beginning so much, the first (attemps of) interactions between the boys, because there was less dialogue and it kept me wondering about what was going on. I like not knowing what they're thinking, and then (sometimes slowly, sometimes suddenly) realizing it.
This was a very good sentence: "Until you're enough for you, you'll never think you're enough for anyone."
A this would be my favorite line: "When the cold had seeped into his bones and he knew he'd caught a chill, he wondered back to the house only to find that pitiful creature siting on the back porch, waiting for him."
Ok I'll leave it here, by and I hope to see more of your writing soon, cause it's my drug v_v
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