Can I just say that this is the best fanfic ever?! OMG THIS FIC WAS LITERALLY A ROLLER COASTER. DROVE ME SO FAR UP, THEN WHEN THERE WAS DRAMA, IT SHOT ME DOWN WITH NO WARNING! I love you author for making this story! I read Brain and now this story just proved to me how awesome of a writer you are! Thanks for putting the PDF! :D
Chapter 41: cool story~
I don't know if it's me or else but i found sometimes was ....confused even if i did understand the story. I don't know how to say; maybe, it was not too strong, repetitive ? don't know~
Chapter 34: Hey there!
I've been enjoying the story and fluff so far, but I have a few comments:
1.Overview - Introduce the problems earlier, it feels as though you are rushing into the fluff(which you are good at) and clawing at an attempt at an angsty drama. Personally, I do not feel that or drama suits you, as I enjoyed brain immensely.
2.Plot strength - When introducing a antagonizing plot, please have stronger reasons. So far, I feel that the jessica-yuri reason is acceptable, the Yoona-Seohyun plot is strong(social dilemma, she is popular), but the TaeNy plot was, honestly, terrible. It's as though you have built up Tiffany from the start as an angel which comes crumbling because of a simple kiss. Even if you wished to portray Tiffany as a more stubborn/unreasonable girl, the problem is that you did not really use the multi-person POV(Taeyeon POV,Tiffany POV) to your advantage.
3.POV's - This had alot of potential. You had set up a situation where you could display the character's inner feelings at all times, but instead it was just used as,literally, DIFFERENT points of view.(This means, it is as though every POV has the same feelings but come from different people.)
4.Plot progression - You dove straight into all couples having relationships instantly, but breaking apart easily due to their confused feelings, which, in turn, confuses me as a member of the audience as well. To me, it seems as though they have sort their feelings out, but this one reason causes them to fall out, even though by now I would have expected the trust and faith a couple has in each other to at least allow the couple to sit down and talk. In order for you to bring apart a couple's love-e.g Taeyeon faces memory loss after an accident, and this situation is abused by her parents to change her back to a respectable and straight girl.
6/10
Overall I still enjoy this story but the points I have brought up are the only things that prevent me from giving this a higher score.
Chapter 40: Thank you. This is pretty entertaining. Glad i read it. I hesitated at first coz i thought it's purely taeny. And i only stan yulsic. Love it!
Chapter 40: i just sat through reading this in one sitting and i gotta say, it was a nice read but i felt like u tried to push all the pairing so much that it felt kinda off, wished u really just focused on 1 or 2 pairings. but i enjoyed read this nontheless
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