Chapter 51: I really hope you finish this! I loved this as much as I loved 'Hey There, Little Red Riding Hood I' and two! Please please please finish it!
Chapter 51: If there's a fourth option, I would choose keep writing this story as is XD I want the plot to pick up. The writing style is not extremely different between the beginning to end that it affects my enjoyment of the story telling. Though if the inconsistency in p.o.v bothers you a bit, you could alternatively get a beta reader to do an edit for you, and you would be able to bounce some ideas off that editor too. Not sure if there's such a thing on this site but I frequent fanfiction.net a lot and that's what writers use as an aide. Good luck with the rewrite.
Chapter 2: I just have another comment XD not that I'm suggesting you change your writing style because it'll be a lot of work but I just found it a bit awkward that some parts are written in 2nd person's point of view when there is probably no way Haerine (me) would notice certain things, ie. fang wanting to glide out, other characters' (other than me) feelings that are not observable. I think it'd be better to write those in 3rd person point of view as you've done towards the end. A mix approach of 2nd 3rd point of view should work well. But honestly I find writing in 2nd person point of view very awkward, so good for you for trying. Actually this is probably one of the first 2nd person p.o.v stories I've read in years.
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