The mature one has come! >:) Kevin and AJ are being so well behaved lol. He kind of reminds me of a mother, getting people to do chores. Nice chapter, I hope you update soon!
"and ability to use a calculator when I need to" and "guys will flock around you like rabid monkeys simply to breathe the same air as you" LOL
I'm still reading the fanfic, latter I will do a better comment. :D
Honestly when I read the foreword I thought this might just be a kind of typical love story, But, was I surprised. As weird as it sounds from the start of the first chapter where you wrote 'A bird just pooped on me. Then again, I probably deserved it.' I became interested in the story. It made me laugh, such a unique way of starting a story with a bird pooping on the main character. This story is just full of lol's.
This story is actually pretty unique and interesting, the idea that she has to have 7 boyfriends appear at her house and then stay with her just cries out for hilarity in the future. Plus trying to hide them all from MBLAQ could be pretty troublesome. I can imagine their reactions wouldn't be all that fantastic when boyfriend after boyfriend appears - they're going to be pretty damn confused.
My only critiscm, if you could even call it that, is that Kevin and AJ seem a bit too childish, but I guess when more serious characters come in it will balance out.
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