Chapter 40: I'm actually happy about the way the whole Jae Hyun situation turned out. And my heart has been hurting this whole time because of everything. Soo Jin you are so stupid. But since it is your first love and you have no experience, I can't blame you.
Chapter 36: YOU'RE SO GOOD. My heart was getting pierced every time I breathed (if you think I'm being dramatic, I'm not). That just means you wrote something that really makes me sad or feel emotions. I know I compliment you a lot but you're really good at writing.
Chapter 34: oh my god I held my breath all throughout that fight (well not really but you know what I mean). My heart was getting stabbed this way and that from that emotional fight and then the making up. Sehun, you are stupid. Soo Jin, you are also stupid but I feel like you're slowly becoming less stupid. You write so well, Author-nim.
Chapter 33: sigh. Here it comes. I'm glad you're consistent, Author-nim. Soo Jin is consistently too nice and too naive. Yoo Ra, even if what you say is true, you threatening Soo Jin doesn't really add up to your story. Well, I'm kind of interested in what will happen if Soo Jin tells Yoo Ra that Sehun still likes her. Soo Jin doesn't have any relationship experience, so she doesn't know the consequences of anything. And she still denies that she likes him. I kind of want it to happen so that Sehun can choose for himself.
Chapter 32: Oh wow. It's hard to explain the piercing feeling in my heart when he said "I do" and then the silence that happened afterwards. You're really good at setting up moods, Author-nim. I'm glad this didn't turn out into one of those cliched situations for too long. There are too many times when good stories were ruined because of that. Good going, Author-nim!
Chapter 25: And just as I asked that, Sehun decides to continue it. I love how you can change the mood of the story really fast whenever you want to. One minute I'm smiling over fluff and the next I'm aching for Sehun.
Chapter 24: It's sad how she's getting used to people touching her that it's not even that traumatizing anymore. And how I'm used to the phrase "Get off my girlfriend!" How can they not be going out? How has she not asked him about it? omg these two are so ridiculousssssssss and she's so street dumbbbbbbbbbb ackkkkkkkkk. I feel like a story in Sehun's POV will just be him stalking her trying to pretend he doesn't care and internally arguing LOL.
Chapter 23: It's weird that now I'm actually hoping that Jae Hyun doesn't have a crush on her. I really like them together as friends. And Sehun and Soo Jin need to GET IT TOGETHER and GET TOGETHER omg but I do like this. They didn't just all of a sudden lose their personalities and get all lovey dovey. They're progressing actually a pretty okay pace considering their stubbornness.
Chapter 22: Your writing makes me smile so much I can't. The friendships and the romance alike and even the random characters like Jae Hyun. ;w; Author-nim I love you
Chapter 21: Wow these two really are idiots. How can they still deny with the HOLDING HANDS and KISSING and PARENTS AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH IM SQUEALING SO HARD THEY ARE SO CUTE BUT STUPID. It's funny because I actually don't mind that they don't acknowledge their feelings. The way you wrote them makes me not care about every other time I've read characters in denial. They are seriously so cute together.
Chapter 19: Was wondering if this moment would ever come when Sehun couldn't help Soo Jin. I expected more to have happened, but Sehun was a gangster after all. I do have to say, the laughing felt a little bit out of place if you don't add stuff to increase the complexity of the laughter, such as relief or shock. But man... that ending was so satisfying.
Chapter 17: Jung Ah and Soo Jin together makes me smile because their friendship is so real. And wow Soo Jin's parent situation is actually normal. Hardworking parents who aren't TOO busy that they don't care about their daughter and aren't TOO lovey dovey that it's weird. And they weren't super poor but also not super rich and just enough stinginess. And wow Soo Jin sure gets into a lot of bad people incidents.
Chapter 16: Totally made up for it with this chapter. I'm really starting to worry about Soo Jin. I feel like she's going to get seriously sick. And oh my gosh these two idiots. At least something's starting to happen. Sehun's always helped Soo Jin and omg Sehun's friends. Such gangsters. As always, I love the little details!
Chapter 15: I'm sorry to say, but this is probably your weakest chapter in terms of writing (SORRY PLEASE FORGIVE ME). The conversation sounded kind of forced and the writing was a bit all over the place, but I still liked the beginning. I *knew* Jae Hyun liked Soo Jin, whether it was a crush or just as a person. Poor Sehun.
Chapter 14: I personally think you did a good job. I teared up. The only thing was that super long and caps locked "beep" because it was almost comical and not serious at all. You showing Sehun's friendships by having them arrive impossibly fast and having him being the one to not cry while everyone around him was. Of course the grandpa would know that she wasn't his real girlfriend. Not yet hehe. Also, I think it would have been more dramatic if you built up even more to Sehun crying at the end. Like it started with a few tears felt on her shirt and then he starts sobbing, but it was written really well. Good job~
Chapter 13: OH MY GOD I SCREAMED SO MUCH MY MOM WAS LOOKING AT ME. THERE'S TOO MUCH FLUFF I CAN'T TAKE IT. THAT ARROGANT BASTARD. You really make long speeches not awkward, which takes skill! And the development of their relationship seems really natural. I'm not talking about the events, but more the emotional development. And wow Sehun actually didn't hide who Yoo Ra was. Thank GOD this isn't cliched. I mean it is, but it's different. GOD when he said "don't fall for me", I thought this was gonna turn serious for a second. Thankfully it didn't. Their banter is really natural and true to their characters. You never disappoint, Author-nim!
Chapter 10: I seriously love how self aware she is, asking herself if they were stalking her. At least she's getting better; she actually screamed this time. And everyone has realistic reactions and feelings, even if the events aren't really realistic. Small details like Baek readjusting his hat, or her shock laughing and flinching at the touch of Sehun. And her crying because her prettiness attracted unwanted attention. When I was younger, I told my mom I wished to be ugly so that nothing would ever happen to me. Now her attractiveness makes more sense. And she actually does spend some time on makeup and hair. And Jung Ah acts like an actual best friend with flaws and strengths.
AWWWWWWWWW THE WHOLE JACKET THING. I TOTALLY understand because her friend bought it and all. I actually like that you don't mention the feelings until Sehun did something about it. It makes it feel even more real because she's trying to hide her discomfort, even from herself. And I feel really bad for Jae Hyun but he really at courting girls.
P.S. also correcting this because I saw this a few times but I don't think "younging" is a real word.
Chapter 9: What really makes this story stand out is how realistic and complex the emotions are. It's cool that the gangsters have a different side to them, just like how bikers are in real life. And how Soo Jin has her own personality that she sticks to and gets confused in realistic ways and not just sudden temporary loss of hearing. I always squeal when Sehun seems to read Soo Jin's mind. I think it's cute that Jae Hyun seems to like Soo Jin and actually cares about her, and it makes even more sense since we find out that their dads work together so they actually know each other haha. But he's still an . And Soo Jin has a different opinion on shopping for once. She dislikes it but isn't totally clueless.
btw I saw this more than once and it's "might as well", not "mind as well" :)
Chapter 8: ACKKKKKKKKKKKK I WANT TO SCREAM MY HEAD OFF THIS IS SO FLUFFY!!!!!!! And lmao never mind what I said before. It's not really realistic that she'd be *that* popular for her looks and smarts when she doesn't really care about how she looks... but maybe it's the combination of the two? Still trying to figure it out. And I know this is weird, but her mom took that exactly how my parents did. They were worried sick but they didn't even yell at me but instead just reminded me sternly to remember my phone, even though my dad really was close to calling the police. Now that you mentioned it in the A/N, I'm super impressed that you barely cursed. This is such skill right here. It still felt intense and everything.
Chapter 7: Awwwwww her feelings are so realistic. I would be totally overthinking the situation too about what the grandpa thought of me. And they are seriously so cute together. Staring at each other. And awwww him being good for his grandpa and blushing!!! And what happened to going back to the hospital before her mom found out LOL. awwwwww that grandpa is so sweet. That ending was so cute. This whole chapter was so fluffy I'm dying.
Chapter 6: Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is the beginning of me shipping them. I was interested in how you were gonna make gangsters actually into nice people that still beat people up but you have me believing it now. He seems like he has reasons. Seriously love the MC and now I love Sehun and now I love them TOGETHER. I love how he teases the MC haha.
Chapter 5: There are a few errors here and there but it's okay in general. So now I guess she's popular because she's smart, pretty, and nice? It doesn't make sense for her to be popular only because she's smart anymore. And I'm glad this school is diverse like a normal school with different types of people. Haha I guess shock really does get to you so that she was more surprised than scared of the guy. And then pushing the guy off her? omg this girl. But I like that she has flaws.
Chapter 4: I really like the first part of this chapter. I'm glad you had her properly traumatized instead of those stories where the girl would have been all "I don't even care because I was saved by OPPAAAAAA". And ha! I should have known. Soo Jin is smart enough to do something like this even though she has no filter for . Take THAT Sehun! And I really like the thought you put into the conversation.
>"Did you think we were that stupid to accept the check?" "No." I kind of lied.
That part was really funny hahaa.
Chapter 3: I'M SERIOUSLY IN LOVE NOW HAHAHAHAHAHA. So she's popular because she's always #1 in academics? At my school, the smartest people were really well known though I wouldn't say they're popular. But I like it. This is seriously amazing haha. Sehun seems to have good reasons for when he beats people up. That one boy is so stupiddddd. $430 for shoes for his girlfriend???? I really like the MC's character. She doesn't think before she speaks but she's kind hearted and she endearingly lacks common sense, which makes sense since she's so book smart. And her friend's funny too. She acts just like us readers because she laughs at everything Soo Jin does hahahahahaa
Chapter 2: Awwwwwwww I was totally correct. It totally does work in an endearing way and it really does showcase her character. I'm really happy she's not those bland spineless MCs but she's not fierce enough to have good comebacks and she's not just the stereotypical nerd haha. Why do I feel like Jaehyun likes her? Like maybe he's that elementary school kid who thinks teasing your crush will make them like you. The MC's thought processes are soooooo cute. "stab me with a straw now" LOL she's so funny! And the part where she is more surprised by the fact that he knows her. I can picture Luhan and Sehun standing up menacingly with their arms crossed hahahaa.
Chapter 1: I like your writing ^^ It has a lot of personality in it. Sometimes, it gets a bit cluttered because you're trying to show every single thought that this character has, but I think it kind of works in an endearing way because obviously this is the type of character who acts before she thinks and thinks a million things at once. It shows her character so you don't have to tell us. Looking forward to reading this! I hope it isn't super cliched.
Chapter 7: I am sorry chingu, I am just leaving a coment after I read your long fanfict. Your fanfict is great, I like your linguistic. Although I am still learning English but I can't understand it well( maybe)
Chapter 39: Dear Authornim, I'm just wondering how many erts are there in their neighborhood. While Soo Jin has quite a strong character and mind and intelligence, why doesn't she do something to stop herself from being victimized?
Chapter 45: i really like your storyyyy...i think i will lost interest like other story i read but you story make my eager up ...i like that character^_^ ^___^^^^^^...thumbs up for youu..,and now i will read your seqeul...^_^..and i think the plot is more interesting..^-^
Chapter 45: Wait. I'm still curious why Sehun called her girlfriend the entire time. I was thinking because he already liked her but denied it in front of her and then in those times, his true feelings came out, plus it's fitting/convenient for those fight scenes, and also because he wants to believe in the lie he told his grandpa? It could be all, none, or a combination of these thoughts, but this is the one thing that stuck in my mind the entiee time I read this.
Chapter 43: Wow I really could punch Soo Jin's ing face right now. She's ing clueless and stupid and yet she always call them "stupid gangsters" lol. This girl needs to get her head dunked in the toilet so she can make up her mind
Chapter 49: Soo Jin must have a thing with hospital and black out really. It was really frustating at first, but slowly i came to realized that that's the feeling you wanted us to feel. I really appreciate how you develop the relationship between them. it's quite a great story.
Gerat Job authornim.
Chapter 46: Wow...I finished it. I didnt sleep a wink last night wen i realised its already 5.30AM. I have to wake up i have my classes..oh no. ANYWAY, U ARE AN AWESOME WRITER.ITS REALLY BEAUTIFUL. I LOVE IT. Thanks for writing this story.
Chapter 49: Omg I'm melting... they're the perfect couple ever! Even though sometimes I feel like I wanna scream at soojin's ear saying that sehun loves her. Hohoho. Btw why those three always hungry.. aigoo... i think if I feed them a whole cow won't even get them full hahaha. Anyway thanks for a very good, beautiful, cute story, authornim!! Good job!! *thumbs up*
Chapter 44: Okay authornim, everytime I said I had enough reading this story and put my phone aside, my mind kept on replaying these stories and how frustrated I am with Soojin!! Gahhh!! It's 5AM here and I didn't sleep at all since 8PM because your writing on this story, the plot everything just make me curious and DAMN AHN SOOJIN!! If I was her friend, I would slap her on her face. Why is it so hard for her to understand Sehun's feelings?? ING YOORA. I'm sorry for cursing.
I'm in love with your story.. now that it's a happy ending. I shall sleep in peace and get myself a panda eyes by tomorrow morning during class...
Gosh authornim, I never felt so attached to story like this. What have you done to meeee T.T anyway. Fighting authornim. Cant wait to read your sequels.
Chapter 46: I lone it, i love it and i love it,,glad i read this,,you make me wish i could date a gangster and at the same time annoyed not knowing one,,hahaha,,i'm kind of out of my mind, right? But seriously,,who wouldn't like having someone always protect you wherever you are and love you whatever you do,,thanks for the story,,
Chapter 47: just read the story today and finished it in I guess, less than 12 hours.. kudos authornim!!! great story.. I'll start reading the sequel now
Chapter 45: I didn't want to be a ghost reader for like all of the chapters but I couldn't help it! I just instinctively press the next button once the chapter ends. Even though I've read stories with a similar storyline (not a bad thing at all, you have so many twists), I just always love it so much and you wrote the story extremely well. My heart hurt when they were fighting. :'( But yay for happy endings! This was such an emotional rollercoaster omg but thank you so much. <3 ^-^ Hoping to read more of your stories.
Chapter 16: Also, I noticed something. Why is the girl always getting hurt and Sehun is always there to help her? Yes alright, it builds up some chemistry but it could be too boring and annoying to read her getting hurt all over again - as if she is just a damsel in distress - that I can’t help but scoff at times
Chapter 19: I'm gonna be honest, why do you make something bad happen to Soo Jin in almost every single chapter? Like who gets /harassed or cut by a knife every time they go out? You're making her a weak charcater like one of those damsels in distress. It's a turn off, I get that you want to make her weak but why do you make it that the guy needs to save the girl?
Chapter 25: The ahjussi just so mean, but .... why Soo jin softed heart and take the juices? If I found the ahjussi , I will teach a lesson for him!!!!!!
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