Chapter 11: Finished reading all the chapters on here and I'm actually excited that Vkook reunited again and love each other.....Jungkook being taken away wasn't great for Tae and went to look for him out on his own.....Both of them are safe and now they need to make sure the other guys get arrested.....The gang needs to know what happened
I'm intrigued that you decided to write about Taehyung getting , or almost getting , in the first chapter, but never mention it again. People who do get faced with those kinds of situations don't just go about their daily lives without being affected by it. I just think that you're using Taehyung's scenario as an excuse for Taehyung and Jungkook to meet. Also, I see that you have a lot of grammar mistakes (confusing your with you're and vice versa) and your fic is heavy with dialogue and has almost no description. I think you have a lot of potential with this fic, but you can kick it up a notch. Also, this is the Internet. You will get criticism eventually, and you should learn how to take it.
Chapter 10: Oh my God, what?!?
Poor Jungkook! Oh, I wonder who those men are! Are they someone against Taehyung's group or something?
T.T
I'm so curious and excited about this! <3
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