Chapter 1: It's beautiful and poetic but.... you kinda lost me at the "he almost forget who he is."
Although what comes into my mind is cannibalism...... I blame the tokyo ghoul marathon I did with my friend yesterday......
Chapter 1: Having been in a church like this by a farmhouse while visiting relatives, I really got the feeling this story was trying to portray (or at least I think I did). I thought using hymn excerpts was really clever! Good job!
- RD :)
Chapter 1: Your word choice was great! But I honestly missed the plot of this??? It felt more like scenes instead of a story if you get what Im saying?
Its pretty good though and a good contender for the contest you are entering no doubt!
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