Chapter 1: Well then! I had no idea what to expect with this one and I certainly didn't see that rather interesting part in the middle but there is a certain beauty to this piece. The parallelism is spot on, if slightly repetitious but it's used to good effect. The way they balance each other out is fascinating and it's curious to see how it takes time for them to see and hear the things the other sees and hears.

I was curious in terms of their night becoming day and their day becoming night... were you talking about an eclipse? That part had me confused with the whole club scene thing. I got a little fuzzy with the tainting bit in the middle and especially why they stayed together after that, but the ending was definitely beautiful. I will say their equal quotes of 'turning nights to days' and 'days to nights' for each other damn near sent chills up my spine. lol

The symbolism of their clothes was a good choice too; having the colors appear as opposites to each other. There is passion here, but you just don't see it until the end.

Good job. ^_^