our life this way

Description

My life means just with him.I just want him but I can't have him. But my life is him.

Foreword

hi every body.my second fic before the other story comes to its end.

the real story is about two friends(girls)that are closer than every one think and they love each other.

and some day they both marry a man.but they don't care and are happy eith their lives.and it's like they are the actual couple and the third wheel is their husband.

so here is the Kyumin version of this story.sorry if it is boring or is not what you think it is.

but anyway enjoy!

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thumbs
#1
congratulations on getting randomly featured!
heclgehog
#2
Chapter 1: Cute and heartbreaking T-T
But yeah, paragraphs are good to separate the story text so its isnt just one big hard to read block.
Forest_pixi
#3
Chapter 1: It was a heartbreaking story really. Why do I think so? Because instead of being true to their feelings, they involved Kyu's sister and now a child. I don't know if the sister realizes what's going on, but my instincts say she does and is either stupid or too heartbroken to do anything about it.

But that is just me.../shrugs/ a good story though.

Grammar. I guess my comments on your other story apply here as well.

Use paragraphs to convey different ideas, a change in scene or topic, etc.

Capital letters at the beginning of a sentence.

Use spacing during dialougue. For example:

"Hey Kyu, how are you?" Sungmin said.

"Wonderful." he replied. His tone indicated otherwise.

"Hey, what's wrong?"

You get the idea. ^^
kaikai2
#4
in one word ,, Beautiful