Hello, here's your goody bag for joining my TMaF semi-contest! Thank you!

Plot: While it's not bad, it is not exactly a complicated plot. Of course, nothing can come out exactly original anymore, so I won't dock the points only by this virtue. Generally, I think the plot is decent; everything is believable and consistent. What I think you can improve is the technicalities of providing scenes. To me, the scenes could be more proportional. You provided numerous of scenes where Hongki and Mina still had no real obstacles, where they were still living happily, and even when they got their busy schedules issue, in the end, Hongki still even got to propose her. Then everything just jumped to the day Hongki broke up with Mina, and then it jumped again to the days where Mina was already happily living with her new family, before it reached the of Hongki's revelation. I think the plot would come out more powerful and comprehensive if you insert scenes like when Hongki was doubting his decision before he broke up with Mina, or scenes where Mina actually required time to move on –instead of the plot being fast forwarded to the aftermath of their disengagement. I understand you might want to conceal Hongki's secret (the reason why he decided to break up with Mina) until the end, and that's fine. You can still conceal it but at the same time add more scenes abovementioned so that the plot would not be so jumpy. The plot is not rushed, I think it flows pretty well, but it is just a tad bit choppy. There are numerous parts where the characters' interaction can be showed, and in this type of relationship-based fiction, characters' interactions would be the most important plot element. Of course, the interaction does not stop at them only during at the introduction paqrt of the story, but most importantly, at the of the story.

Characters: To be honest, aside from them being this once happy couple (which is not exactly a trait/character), and Hongki being an altruist man for sacrificing his happiness for Mina, I do not exactly feel the characters. Well, I know you indicated some points like how hardworking Mina was, but there are no distinctive personalities about them. I think your characterization is focused more on how they feel towards each other rather than the stand-alone characterization themselves. Another point is that I found it a bit hard to believe how... 'accepting' Mina was to the initial breakup. Sure, in the end, she could and would move on and accept everything. But for a relationship that has lasted that long and a happy one, an abrupt breakup should have stirred more emotions in her. One preferential (this is a matter of reader's preference, a rather subjective one) comment would be that I felt the act of Hongki telling Mina why he broke up with her slightly rubs off the unconditional and selfless love that I used to perceive from his character. Maybe it's based on the fact that he stays alive in the end, and if his action of telling her the truth does not make him as altruistic as in the earlier perception of his character. If he dies, this is understandable, because in the end, he owes Mina the truth and nothing could be turned otherwise. Here, it's as if he's mildly unsatisfied and thus felt the urge to tell Mina, even knowing that she is already happily married. A suggestion to make in the situation where he is alive (because certainly, I understand it would simply be unjust if Hongki's sacrifice was not considered), is to have Mina found this out herself, or that someone close to Hongki told Mina instead of Hongki telling it himself to Mina.

Style: There is nothing wrong with your style, technically. The dialogues and narration are well-proportioned, there are sufficient descriptions on the available scenes, and while some parts are rather bland, some of the lines are just romantic and beautiful. I think what could be noted is the fact that I feel some scenes could have been more emotional than what it is now. In this kind of fiction, I think a contemplative writing style would be appropriate –of course, not in all parts of the story, but in scenes which show the anguish. This is a bit related to character and plot, but again, this kind of fic relies heavily on character's struggle –of how they feel. I think it would be better to add more feel to the characters and storyline. You have some beautiful lines, so use that kind of thing more often as your ammunition in this type of fic. Oh, and be careful on run-on sentence, for example: "I decided to stop by the post office remembering that there was a letter marked as highly important waiting for us which was delivered in our house but we were away that time so instead, the post man left a note saying to pick it up but I only remember it now." Sorry for quoting that in full, but I just want to show you that I actually figuratively lost my breath when I read this sentence, hehe. This is only the major one, I think others are still acceptable though :)

Suggestion:
• Remember, pick and utilize the scenes wisely. Especially in the fic where the theme/message is to have one move on and accept love the way it is, choose scenes that would contribute to convey this message more.
• Characters' feelings to each other are extremely important (especially in this type of fanfiction), but before we get to that, make a strong base on the character individually first.
• Add more emotions to the writings.

Favorite Parts:
• Definitely "Maybe it's not about the happy ending, maybe it's about the story." This is such a strong line that sweetly and effectively wraps up the whole message you want to convey in the story, so kudos for that.
• They kissed a lot! Kyaaa! ^^
• I am softie when it comes to a sacrificed love –so I love the theme :)

Chapter 1: =~= take responsibility~!! haha
you made me cry TT ^ TT, wonderfully done oneshot.
sad but that is what makes it so beautiful !