So today is Taeminnie's birthday and I didn't know what fanfic to write about him. So I decided I'd post one of my few poems instead. (Well I hope it's a poem).
Chapter 1: It's certainly a poem. There is no doubting that, but I'm not sure what pattern you were aiming for. There is definitely a rhyme and rhythm to some parts and others sort of stumbled along a bit, but overall it works.
Looking at it again, you do have a stanza pattern to begin with and then deviate near the end, though I wasn't sure what the effect was meant to be. I liked it though. Don't get me wrong, and the setup does nothing to detract from the meaning in it. The beauty of poems is that they are highly subjective and open to interpretation from many sources. There are lots chances to read more into it at various points so it was a good use of words.
This one feels kind of bittersweet actually. :) Good job!
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