Wow, it's a much better work than the last. Good job.
Actually there are many things I want to comment, but I'll try to make it short.

I noticed that this work is very much descriptive, and I enjoyed them. I really like your english, it's very good and clearly improving. (My mind was imagining the EL descriptive story you showed me... quite a long time ago if you remember haha, and it's obvious that you've improved a lot.) although there are little grammar mistakes here and there, but overall: pretty enjoyable.
For the plot howevr, I don't know if it's just me missing something, but I'm not really clear about why 'the reader' character is dying. Is it of age or illness? Or accident or catastrophe or attempted murder?! (lebay)
Suggestion: If you want to attack your reader psychologically with your story, you might as well describe the character's emotion more instead of the plot, but more extremely. Many stories have extreme plot, but frankly end up weirdly excessive and doesn't capture the readers emotionally, if not planned out carefully... But even with a simple plot, depending on the way you play with words, you can even draw tears from a reader with a strong description of the character or of the scene. This is what I learned. But then again my comment is in your disposal. You're free to use it (I'd be grateful if you do) or deny it or ignore it.

Wow. That ended up a long comment after all. Anyways! Thank you for the read, evergreenchangmin-chan!

seems nice..