SHINee Help us with Hwaiting story Review
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Title: SHINee Help us with Hwaiting!
Author: SHINee2Minho
Brief description of story: Nao and Shindo are mistaken for KPOP idols and put on the same plane as SHINee, with their help they will try to survive in the idol world
Genre: comedy and slight romance.
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Title – 2/10
Honestly speaking, the title doesn’t exactly make sense. I don’t exactly understand what you’re trying to say in the title. Hwaiting is a Korean term, which means something along the lines of ‘try hard’ or ‘good luck’ however, in the way you have used it in your title ‘SHINee help us with Hwaiting’ it doesn’t really make sense.
Description/forward – 19/20
A good description and Forward! It gives quite a lot of detail yet it still manages to interest readers. There are quite a few small grammatical errors in the forward.
Originality/ Plot – 17/30
Personally, the plot isn’t so eye-catching to me. I prefer stories that are more towards the realistic side, and in your story, I find it impossible for 2 people to share the same name and appearances of 2 other people.
The originality of your plot is highly commendable. Out of many fanfics I have read on AFF, I have never come across a story with the same plot as yours, however the Australia to Korea theme has been overused by many authors.
Grammar/Punctuation/ Writing style – 26/30
You have really good grammar, however there are tiny errors in a few areas of your story. The Punctuation is quite good and you have a casual writing style. You could try using a variety of words at times, instead of repeating the same words.
Characters and Details – 7/10
I’m not so used to the fact that Jonghyun’s character happens to be so attached to Nao’s character, but I won’t take of marks however you need to be more detailed in your writing. Your sentences need to flow more instead of being so dry.
Total – 71/100
General Comments
Your story is written really well, and I praise your writing skills however with a better plot, your story can go so much further! :)
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