What's wrong with me?

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My first one shot!!! Key wants Jonghyun. Jonghyun doesn't want Key. Key decides one day that he can't wait any longer, so he confesses. What will happen when Jonghyun knows the truth?

Foreword

"I've... always loved you, Jongie."

"Key... I... I don't know what to say."

"Say you like me too."

"I'm sorry, Key. I just... can't say that."

 

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Ilonahaku #1
Chapter 1: OMG, it was really amazing and so beautifully written! I love how the ending fits the title of your story so well.<3 this fanfic really touched my heart. *.*

At first I thought that the question could re-interpreted as something what Key is missing, like that he is sad or has some emotional problem (melancholy, not to be able to accept the outcome of his confession, may be some other trouble) after break-up. But in reality it was meant that there is nothing wrong with him, because he doesnt love any guy or Jjong anymore? That was a twist for me! :D

Yeah, Jjong´s smile is really cute, no wonder that it has such great effect on Key. :D
I felt so sorry for Key that he cried because of hapiness at first(that he could confess and that he remembered such great times from past) and that then he cried because of broken heart and rejection. T.T
Too bad that Jjong immediately told him that he cant love him more than a brother. I think he didnt stop Key, because he was too shocked and over-reacted. I was disappointed by his outburst. But I thought that he would contact Key later, if Key was really special for him. It is somehow weird that Jjong successfully found him after year, although it looked like that Key was not hiding himself, if he was waiting for letter/message/call from him.

Besides that I really liked the pasta fight and that Key kissed him, when he confessed. Such a bittersweet kiss. Although he was happy that he could confess at first and later he regretted it, I think he did a good thing that he confessed. He found out real character of Jjong, although it was a painful lesson for him. T.T

Thank you very much for sharing this amazing fanfic! <3
-yumechrys #2
Chapter 1: This is very nice!!
You should make this into a story or sequel!! ^^
shanaxyuuji #3
Chapter 1: Ohhh Key Oppa , Why did you left Jjong oppa ?? :( Nice Story anyways Author-Nim ~
cake1331 #4
Yeah. It was 1:00am when I wrote it, so I wasn't really thinking about pace. jess_mmam, thanks! And also a thanks to Kikwik!!!
jess_mmam #5
Chapter 1: I like it! The last sentence 'It was the best for me, because now I know that there's nothing wrong with me' gave me goosebumps... At first I was thinking 'the introduction paragraph is too short and what's this question in orange color?!' but the last 2 phrases makes this story so meaningful! The pace was a little fast but all in all it was good!
Congratulations on your first one-shot and good luck for your future stories!

Thanks for sharing! And yeah, a sequel would be good! <3
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