A/N : um please be warned that this story is a little on the heavy side for its smidgen(?) of insanity. and also warning for ambiguous character death in the end :D
Reading this fic during my night duty actually gave me more chills than I really needed. *BBBRRRRR*
Thank you for posting such an artsy literature-like piece of work.
And though I would usually leave comments like 'Yoochun is in serious need of psychiatric help', I am just going to leave that for now.
Here goes... ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL YOUR READERS WITH THE SUSPENSE?! I ALMOST DIED HOLDING MY BREATH!! YAAHHHH!!
not enough characters to ... express my love for this so.
'However, since Yoochun was supporting him all the way back home, the pain became a little bearable. And when they reached home, it was Yoochun who had dressed up his wounds again, making gentle healing contacts to Junsu's body while Junsu watched him shyly from underneath his lashes.'
i just love this part because you can really tell how junsu feels at that moment and how happy he is. and he's so adorable here! i just want to run up to him and hug him and protect him from evil yoochun.
'However, even if he reveled in the sight, it didn't give him the relish he desired of knowing that this wound were inflicted by hands other than him. '
and here i just went CRAZY. i was smiling at first, because i actually thought yoochun cared for junsu then BAM! my heart cannot take this. asdfjklsd;faksdfjl
'"Beautiful little Junsu." Yoochun had whispered again, warm breaths ghosting onto his skin and Junsu shivered as his toes curled at the unexplainable sensation. '
in this scene, yoochun whispers. and i think it's because of his voice, but only yoochun can do that and make me this scared of him. yoochun has a husky and low voice, and usually people associate that as really y when they whisper, but here i'm just so scared like asdjfklsd;fskj
"There was the insanity akin to a mad clown drawn all over his face."
ASJDF ASEIFJ AOSFJ SODJF OW JUST OMG WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN NOW.
and then it ends.
this was really quiet and i loved how everything builds up to a . but instead of writing the , you let the lullaby take over and i just love that so much because it adds a really eerie silence -ish mood to it.
so there are 2 types of horror movies in the world, the cheap BLOOD IS EVERYWHERE type and the really eerie psychological kind which i think is so much better, and this was the second type.
i don't usually comment like this..
heck i usually don't comment ever.
let me just take a moment to calm down because wow this was awesome.
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okay.
i'm' calm now.
i LOVED how you put the song's lyrics into the story and i know it's supposed to be a lullaby but the lyrics just add to the creepiness factor. I could hear some scary old witch with a really wispy voice singing it. I read this with music on for the first time, and then i went back to read it without music on and it was SO creepy. -shudders-
some of my favorite lines.
'The baby saw the glinting tip and with a cute and eager giggle, its fingers moved away from Yoochun's and reached out for the sharp knife instead. '
just. OH POOR POOR JUNSU. so innocent and adorable. this line made me shiver.
'And down will come baby-
The last of that nursery rhyme resounded in his head over and over again. Broken, incomplete and unfulfilled.'
so when i read this the second time, i noticed how genius everything was because the first time yoochun attempts to kill junsu, he fails, so the lullaby cannot end. but then
'"It'll be complete now...My revenge."
And down will come baby, cradle and all.'
in the end, the lullaby does finish and when i noticed that my heart just went "BOOM" and it made such an impact on me.
'Yoochun watched as Junsu tended to the cuts by himself on the bed across from him, the book that he was reading before already left to be put at his side because he was more fascinated in the way Junsu's face twisted in pain as he applied medications to his sore injuries.'
AND IN THIS LINE, Yoochun is so scary like omfg finding pleasure in others pain. that's so ... scary.
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