Story Title: Persona: The Last of the Originals

Description: 10 out of 10 points

Forward:  5 out of 5 points Jimin is in pain *crying*

: 6 out of 10 I felt like there really wasn't a point yet, so i'm waiting for it in the future chapters

Overall Appeal to reader(includes aspects such as posters and background): The poster is beautiful and very well made, the color scheme plays out well. The poster also fits the mood of the story and gives me a taste of who the characters are 😊 I love the description and everything else as well ^^ 20 out of 20 points

Alone:
Chapter Title:  5 out of 5 The chapter title describes the chapter quite well ^^

Grammar:  10 out of 10

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space your dialogue out properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of view:  5 out 5

Did your overall chapter make sense: 25 out 25

Reviewer’s Comment: I’m not crying, I’m not…. Ok nvm I am. Precious Jiminie….

Secrets:

Chapter Title:  5 out of 5 There were maaany secrets revealed in this chaper lol

Grammar: 10  out of 10

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of View:  5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense:  25 out of 25

Reviewer’s comments: That was a lot unleashed right there…. I’m scared for Jimin

Original:

Chapter Title: 5 out of 5 The chapter title really relates to the content of the chapter 😊

Grammar:  10 out of 10

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of View: 5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense:  22 out of 25

Reviewer’s comments: Though it was a very well written chapter, I personally felt like is was a lot to take in and there was a lot of dialogue at once, it can get a bit overwhelming but it’s up to you whether you wanna change some things or not. Also, loved the ending of the chapter, very smooth.

Alpha:

Chapter Title:  5 out of 5 Just a thought, maybe you could name the chapter, His Alpha

Grammar:  10 out of 10 I gotta say, your grammar is quite flawless 😊

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of View:  5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense:  24 out of 25 I have to admit I did get a bit confused at the beginning when Yoongi was entering, I thought it was like a different scene from a different time and place but maybe I wasn’t paying attention? I think a few minor details would be enough to make it clear.

Reviewer’s comments: I liked how this chapter had less dialogue, I like stories better that way. I did skip over some parts where I felt uncomfortable reading. I loved the ending though, it was once again really, really smooth. Overall, this was an amazing chapter.

Beta:

Chapter Title:  out of 5

Grammar: 7 out of 10 I did notice quite a few minor mistakes like where you said “It feels like there were two persons living inside of him and it’s turned him into an introvert” Instead of “persons” the correct word to use is “people”. Also, you said “Why couldn’t he control him, like any other Alpha can control their wolf inside of them?” there are a few grammar mistakes in this one sentence. The way that you should write this would be “Why couldn’t he control himself just like any other Alpha controls the wolf inside of themselves?” I highlighted the key points you should compare within both sentences.

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly): 9 out of 10 Though most readers will not notice this (so you don’t have to worry about fixing this, it’s just little info) there were a few places where you used commas in the wrong places. Though I noticed it, it won’t effect most readers so you don’t have to worry about fixing it.

Were you consistent with your points of View:  5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense: 25 out of 25

Reviewer’s comments: That was an amazing chapter omg. I’m guessing Beta(the chapter title) is referring to Youngjae? Anyhow, I absolutely loved this chapter, other than the grammar errors it was very well written and flowed really well. You’re really good at ending the chapters tho.

Flirt:

Chapter Title:  5 out of 5 the chapter title fits well ^^

Grammar:  9 out of 10

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of View:  5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense:  25 out of 25

Reviewer’s comments: The ending was once again, exceptional. Jungkook is so evil tho lol I ship Jungkook and Jimin more rn than I do Yoongi and Jimin, but istg if Jungkook hurts Jimin in anyway… :’(. Anyway LOVED THIS OMG

To Forgive or Forget:

Chapter Title:  3 out of 5 I feel like the title could have been better maybe something like Jealousy, but i find it hard to understand what the chapter title has to do with the content. So is it like should Jimin forget Yoongi or forgive him?

Grammar:  10 out of 10

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of View: 5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense:  25 out of 25

Reviewer’s comments: I felt like this chapter was fairly short, but that’s okay. I loved it though, Yoongi being sooo jealous :D I still ship Jungkook and jimin tho even though it feels like Jungkook is just using Jimin, maybe he’ll develop real feelings for Jimin later? 😊

Confrontation:

Chapter Title:  5 out of 5

Grammar: 10 out of 10

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of View: 5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense:  25 out of 25

Reviewer’s comments: The ending was once again, flawless. Your vocabulary selection is really strong and makes your story a lot more descriptive, which I love. Okie so new ship 😊 DK and Jimin or Jungkook and Jimin, I’m still not really liking the Yoongi and Jimin ☹ Definitely don’t see Jimin and Jackson happening tho. SOMEONE COME SAVE MY PRECIOUS JIMIN T^T

The First Temptation:

Chapter Title:  5 out of 5

Grammar:  10 out of 10

Formatting (did you properly use quotation marks and did you space out your dialogue properly):  10 out of 10

Were you consistent with your points of View:  5 out of 5

Did your overall chapter make sense:  25 out of 25

Reviewer’s comments: Jimin is savage orz,