Hello everyone! Here are my comments on: 

> Bleeding Love, Blu3Wind

Title/Foreword/Description:

The title is pretty ordinary; it didn’t catch me as a reader at all. I do think the use of the word ‘LOVE’ in titles is cliché and an absolute giveaway of the love that’s actually going to happen. It isn’t completely bad though. The word ‘BLEEDING’ made me consider all types of love, from hurtful to loose to fiery and so on. 

The description was appealing: it had all the right elements in giving a brief entry to the story without telling everything and yet knowing enough about what’s going to happen that it pulls you. 

Grammar and Effective Communication:

The grammar is superb and perfect; I hadn’t seen any single mistake, but I believed that there wasn’t a secure and good communication between the characters. The dialogue is dull and repetitive. The character of the OC is fiery and sometimes unfair; so she said things that made her sound biased and ignorant and she hadn’t had a self reflective movement (of course at the end she did) where she thought she was being unfair and judgmental. 

Well Incorporation of Prompts:

The incorporation of prompts is perfect; Every single one of the prompts chosen were put into the story, in both the author’s own understanding and the understanding I first fell into when I read them. Kudos to the author!

Unique and Eye-Opening Plot: 

The plot was repetitive. I liked reading it, and was enjoyable. But in the sense of uniqueness, it was very ordinary. I’d say I read a few books about an assassin who gets ed over her boss and ended up loving and trusting the person she was ordered to murder. The soulmate bond forcing her to lay low the killing was the most unique thing; I liked it a lot.

Characterization and Development: 

Aside the dialogue, their relationship’s dynamic was slow yet progressive. It was beautifully written, and Baekhyun’s character remained gentle yet sarcastic at the beginning and the end of the story. He hadn’t gone through unrealistic changes due to things, and our heroine’s feelings regarding Baekhyun was beautifully articulated. The inner battle between the heroine’s emotions, logic and lustful desires regarding Baekhyun was complex and realistic; the author was able to depict the contradicting emotions of wanting and not wanting things — Baekhyun, in this case — and how the battle was going within someone. This was the thing I liked the most in this story. 

Overall Impression:

The story was enjoyable, especially the parts where She and Baekhyun would fight over their growing affections for one another. I found the part where She was seducing Xiumin a bit unrealistic, in the way he didn’t catch her nervousness and her absolute hate to do such a thing considering He’s a very strong vampire who can catch pheromones and stuff. Other than that part, everything was beautifully made.

I think Yeonji’s character can be developed more. Let’s see. I think that for an assassin, she’s a little bit less intelligent than she should, or maybe it was deliberate from your side so you can make the plot move. She’s also a strong character, but I genuinely disagree in her ways of showing this strength. Baekhyun also showed no part of him that would give him this leniency, regardless of the bond. Actually, I think her upbringing and her training should made her more catious about her vulnerability around him, instead of falling into it all the time.

I also would avoid stereotyping evil women — or women in general — as dressing provocatively and acting in an emotional way without using self-control. I’m not saying there aren’t people like that, but it’d be nice if authors used less of such over accruing ideas.
Baekhyun’s personality at the end was developed a lot more than he was at the beginning. He became soft, and showed beautiful characteristics that made him humane enough to like. 

I LOVE IT when people portray Jongin’s character as a soft person with soft eyes and loving personality. It shows his real colors in real life and breaks a lot of stereotypes about him, which, as you can guess, is what I adore about reading. 

The whole idea about soulmates being so interlinked that one of them feels the pain is pretty amazing. I have seen it scarcely before and always wanted to read more about it. I’m glad that I read your story.I liked that when Yeonji was presented with the King, he did not have a miraculous change of morals when regarding mercy, and kept his prejudice against his people even in daying.

 

> Arco, TrueBoice101

Title/Foreword/Description:

To be very honest, I didn’t understand what ‘Arco’ is, but seeing from the description that it’s an imaginary world made me super excited. I really like reading about other worlds and stuff. When I first began reading it, I realized that it wasn’t a world that existed, but a world that Baekhyun’s writing about. So, it’s a world only in paper. It was pretty amazing. I have read a few books about this certain idea, and I loved every one of them! Arco is definitely nominated to be an actual book, too. 

Grammar and Effective Communication: 

There wasn’t a lot of characters in the story to begin with, so the communication was pretty limited. The grammar, however, was perfect. I hadn’t found a single mistake; and the author’s wide range of vocabulary was amazing. I had stumbled upon words I didn’t know, and I was on a continuous streak of translating things, ahaha. A great experience. You know a story is well-written when you stumble upon a lot of things you don’t know, so Google is only a click away. 

Well Incorporation of Prompts: 

I think that most of my entries have well incorporation of prompts, but Arco is the best one in incorporating! It’s very well-done, and I felt like I have been going through a story I knew what was going to come out of because of the prompts and quotes used. 

Unique and Eye-Opening Plot:

As I said before, the uniqueness is definitely there. Arco as an imaginary world alive in the imagination of Baekhyun, the writer. I have only seen a few stories similar than this, and of course, they all have different plots of their own. Kai’s bizarre quests and his even stranger companion is a little bit strange. You sit on your bed looking at your phone wondering what the hell is going on; but in a way it’s exactly what the author intended. The entirety of the story is a symbolism of suicidal thoughts and psychological problems, and I liked it. I admit, I didn’t understand it at first, and I had to check the last notes from the author explaining things to get it. Hehehe. 

Characterization and Development: 

As I said before, there wasn’t a lot of characters to begin with aside Baekhyun himself, and the character that he created, Kai. They couldn’t have had any personal communication, but there was their own personal growth. Baekhyun is going through a lot so the story was h