I MISSED THIS FIC AAAAAAAA

Chapter 2: I want to point out that the title, The Crying City, is interesting because in our real-life world, we don’t think of rain as something bad. Rather, rain waters our crops and washes the dirt off our cars. However, in this world, heavy rain is an ominous presence.

Heejoo seems to be the apprentice of Madam Lo, and the Holy Hall sounds very sacred. I can tell that good and evil forces are coming into the story just from that name alone!

One of my favorite parts in this story is when Madam Lo wants to cut down the plants because it will taint the Holy Hall in her perspective, but the other madams (I see the lower case!) are quick to convince her not to. Madam Lo doesn’t seem unreasonable. She isn’t a dictator despite the obvious distaste.

I’ve noticed that Heejoo hangs onto her Madam’s every word. What she likes, Heejoo likes as well. What she doesn’t like, Heejoo doesn’t like too. The characterization here is spot-on and props to you for incorporating her personality!

However, I noticed that the ladies are doing manual labor by lifting sacks of potatoes. Where are the men? I am sure you will answer this in do time, but I like how chapter 1 raises questions to us readers.

In addition, I believe Lady Glory got her name because she has powers. It is mentioned that she can stop the rain! How awesome is that?

The Outer Circle is a mystery...do people who leave it become demons?

I hope more readers can share their thoughts, comments, and speculations on this brilliant fantasy piece (and it’s usually not my genre!) so we can encourage the author in her writing journey. Please do leave a comment :) I can tell from the plot and from the sentences that they aren’t easy to craft. I’m a writer myself, and it can take hours, days, or weeks to produce a chapter we think is “good.” Reading only takes a minority of the time. Send your love and support to this amazing author here!

Chapter 1: The names? The prophecy? The introduction? DUDE, LUMFEN SOUNDS AWESOME!

Chapter 2: I finally got to commenting my thoughts :')

Anyways, I really liked the concept you introduced in the description; I'm a er for prince and royalty!au's tbh. Also, the talks about the Outer Circle and the dangers past it kinda remain me of Attack on Titan (idk if you're into anime, so if you're not, just forget I said anything about it LOL) where the people have these walls to protect them. I'm curious as to what Heejoo's position/role is since she seems to follow Madam Lo as her superior.

In the last few paragraphs, Heejoo says that "the madams decide on all those things," and I'm even more curious as to what the madams do. There wasn't a lot of information on the monarchy/ruling system, but there may possibly a queendom here (Lady Glory seems to be a very, very important figure)?? I would be so down for that...

Anyways, I can't wait to see what will unfold! Meanwhile, just take it easy on the updates; everyone's busy anyways so it's understandable, and honestly quality > quantity!

Chapter 2: Man this story is good...I cannot wait till the next update

Chapter 2: "White was the purest color, but at the same time it was the easiest to taint." djfkjdfhkjdh never in a million years would my 2 brain cells be able to come up with this sentence. idk why i loved that part so much, seeing as it's probably irrelevant (?) to the story, but it somehow feels like a foreshadowing to future events that will unfold!

i opened this yesterday but i couldn't finish the chapter because it was already 4am and i had a paper to submit before 5am.... happy to say i'm glad i pushed off reading this chapter because it definitely required my full attention and focus to grasp the things that are happening! i like this chapter a lot and i can't wait to read more of this world!!!

i can't wait for this i just realized this is The Silver-Haired Baekhyun you were talking about ;u;