jiwoo and other nonsubtleties

Description

subtlety was not amongst the colors that constituted jiwoo

or, jungeun and the ways jiwoo can be loud.

 

Foreword

you guys, I really at making descriptions.

but i hope you give the story a chance. i'd like to think that i'm a better story-writer (emphasis on 'like to think')

lynxardin
also, comment your fave line/s!!

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miraihomo_
#1
Chapter 1: ouch that hurt a lot. i love how you portrayed lip's feelings from platonic to confusion then finding out she's been in love all along. the longing and the sudden feeling of jealousy when sooyoung started to get in the picture sends me... too bad though, it hurts like a .

idk what to say, jiwoo's a sweet bubbly girl who got so much love to give so i can't blame jungeun for that matter. i just wish there's some kind of continuation like where jungeun decides to confess or like a closure for whatever will happen in the future, either way you have successfully made my heart clench. it's soft and sad but it's beautiful like u author <3
HilbertSpace #2
Chapter 1: jungeun is a poetic sap and sort of panic gay around jiwoo ugh love that for her (not the one sided feelings though, that hurted)

i liked the recurring theme of subtlety, how jiwoo completely lacks it, and how jungeun lacks it too from our point of view when we hear her romanticizing, but sometimes it just bleeds through when jiwoo interrupts her inner monologues like that, which makes her lose her control for a little bit like the panic gay she is. it's a cute contrast, and you wrote it really well! the end with jungeun's painful acceptance felt like the end of a sentence but not a paragraph, and without the completed tag on the story i find myself hoping for a second part aaaah this is great! amazing! you did all that!! i'll be lookin forward to more of your writing in the future!!
taintedcolor #3
Chapter 1: ladies we out here crying :((( this is really good but also angsty but like we love that too!

i love how you write- put feelings into words that are poetically descriptive yet not hard to grasp and understand. can’t wait for what’s to come :D
SatoshiIdiot #4
Chapter 1: :(
nadcuht #5
Chapter 1: :(