Seventh Chapter

Don't run without me, please

I translated this for 5 hours... really?

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Jonghyun’s POV

He was still making fun of me! I didn‘t like him! I snorted, but stood up and walked out to the door of the dining room. I didn’t want to be here for a minute! Jinki went after me when I saw a smile on his face. He would laugh at me?! How did he dare? And then he walked quietly next to me! That was unfair! We walked through the prison’s corridors… and there was a huge amount of people here! A lot of people… I could use for my plan! Do you even have a plan, Dino? Well, I maybe don’t have a plan yet, but I will make up one!

"Are there such people really? Like so much!" I blinked suprised.

"Yeah, I don’t know the exact number, but you change in the dining room, there are some groups in which you are going there," Jinki smiled and nodded.

In the past prison… I didn’t know how much people were there since they kept me in one place always… they were too scared! But this information would be good for me. I could use it… I looked at prisonersand their guards as they were walking around us… One of us can hit someone’s feet… magnify their strenght… but Jinki kept watching me… I was sure that he will be distrubed by something. Soon we were by one cell. It had bars so someone could watch from outside what was happening inside. Well, it wasn’t good…

"Well, this is your cell, Hyun, yours and Kibum‘s... you have your own bathroom too, so please, you can enter the estate," Jinki smiled and pushed the bars. When I was in that cell for only one… there weren’t these bars.

"And you will come on the therapy?" I asked Jinki.

"No, unfortunately not, but I'll be having dinner with you tonight, along with Minho," he smiled and nodded. Fine… dinned in the dining room will be too… we have to plana n escape… and I know who can help me…

"Okay, so have a nice day, Frog and Rabbit," I laughed and went into the cell.

"I'll give you Frog!" Minho snapped when Kibum laughed but kissed Minho and went to the cell. I grinned with satisfaction and looked at the two when Jinki laughed.

"Come on, Frog," he grimaced and stamped the chin.

"You are starting it too!" Minho snapped, but then they walked away and I didn’t hear them.

"Will there be still the bars and they will see us all the time?" I looked at Kibum who sat on the floor in front of me.

"Only until the evening check... then they will close..." He nodded and looked at me, his eyes travelled from my heels to my head.

"I don‘t think that you should be the one who I should serve..." He watched me sharply and it seemed to me that he would jump around my neck in every minutes and scratched my neck or something.

"Weren‘t you the one who had been subordinate all the time in the dining room?" I looked at his eyes cruelly.

He jumped at that moment, but I made a step quickly to the side. He jumped on me but I truckled under him when he fell on my bed. I quickly sat on him and my nails scratched his neck. I pressed my nails to his neck more and leaned against his ear.

"I will show you that I am really the one that you should listen to... But I would not like to… I don’t advice it to you... Little fox..." I hissed, but pulled his shirt a little bit up when… in the middle of his back… I saw it… a hint of a sign… The demonic character… I looked at my weirst where my blood was warm. I hissed and swallowed, but with my nails, which were too sharp, I cut in the middle of wrist my skin when my blood began to flow out of it.

"Now you will get to know... who I am... who you are... Kim Kibum..." I whispered in his ear, but with a nail I traced the character on his back when the blood was a bit out and then I traced the sign with my writst.

Our blood was joining. Kibum hissed, curled and I had to put my hand over his mouth to avoid shouting unnecessarily.

I was careful, I didn’t want guards to see us, but rather I let go a bit of my aura that had driven them away. I put my wrist in the middle of his mark, when I thought that my hand was burning, but his blood was pulled into my wrist! I widened my eyes and took deep breath when I closed my eyes.

My eyes were suddenly red, then they were black and white. Kibum shivered and trembled under me and I felt that there was something going on between us what should happen a long time ago... joining... I suddenly felt the strength but also the weakness... we were vulnerable... if someone hurt me, it would hurt Kibum but who knows how much it would hurt him. They could also provoke him. I breathed deeply, then went down next to Kibum when I let him go and squeezed my eyelids. My hand ached, really.

"So... it's really you..." Bum murmured.

"I... said... it to you..." I took my breath and looked at him when I grinned and closed my eyes a bit.

"Why don‘t you open the prison? Why don‘t you destroy it?" He asked me.

"Because it would be a lot of noise... and people would be interested in me... about us... to examine us... to close us in cages... to make experiments... we are supernatural that should never be... I don’t remember anything... just know that my parents took me and my brother here… they erased half our memories, just left something to us, but... I always grabbed one of the memories... I can day by day remember… something… maybe it is because my twin is younger and I'm older and I have more strength... more power with you," I breathed and looked at the blonde who was watching me.

"You already have brown eyes..." He just told me... he told me only that?!

"You will tell me only this?" I muttered.

"I don’t know what else to say... I was told that my... Lord is strong and I can try him, I can try to beat him," he smiled innocently.

"Well, you see... you tried," I grinned when Kibum nodded and went to sit on his bed.

"I am glad that this bed isn’t in front of bars…“ I breathed. Yeah, my bed is at a better angle… They could see Kibum now, but not me.

"Mhm... yeah," he grinned.

"Because they would have to kick you in solitude!" He stuck his tongue at me,

"Don’t try, Fox," I winked at him when he smiled, but I was lying down and looking at the ceiling.

"What are you planning?" He asked me.

"Run away..." I spoke.

I heard him straighten up on the bed.

"What?! And how... how do you want to do it?" He blurted.

"Simply... and you'll help me..." I laughed and looked at him.

"What?! Do you know how I ended when I tried to escape?" He blinked.

"No..." I shook my head.

"I killed the director of the prison where I was..." He whispered. I started laughing.

"You are like a pile of misfortune... aren‘t you here for another murder?" I looked at him as he shook his head.

I looked at him in surprise.

"So what are you doing here?" I asked and he laughed bitterly.

"They just wanted to do it... they threw the murder on me... sometimes something in my head ... happened... as if... overflowed... and then I was a psychopath... since my sign started burning… I couldn’t think as myself… I wasn’t myself…" He blinked.

I stopped. "So... that means that we were together... always in contact..." I breathed out.

"Yes... this started a year ago... before I had stopped it… I could make it stop for a bit... but now it was far stronger… stronger than myself... but when you came... it's gone..." He breathed out and rubbed his head.

I blinked in surprise but couldn‘t answer him... "Guys! I'm here, we're going to eat!"

God... Rabbit... it was a heck of a thrill and you're coming!

"And don‘t you want to bring us the food here when you're so full of energy?" I laughed.

"Mhm ... I really don‘t want to! Do what I told you..." Jinki laughed and unlocked the cell.

"Bummie..." There was a deep voice.

"Minho!" Kibum whispered, jumping on his feet and going quickly to the big frog.

"Aigoo..." I groaned.

"Come on or you'll be hungry," Jinki smiled.

"The comfort like this is sometimes damaging..." I grinned, but at the end I got up.

"Well, you see Puppy, how good you can listen to me," he grinned as I walked over to him and patted his face.

"Hey... Puppy... don‘t provoke and go..." He winked at me when... hit my with his baton! That little brat! I would tickle him to die! He would be amazed!

"Hey!" I jerked and jumped on him... but at that moment I was badly hit by my side.

"Aaaaaa!!!" I screamed and Kibum growled.

Minho grabbed Kibum tightly and someone gripped my arms. Jinki looked at me and someone surprised. I felt my anger rising in my body and the guy behind me, he gripped my hands at the back of my back quite spasmodically. Freeze cold ran over his back and he felt for a moment that someone was breathing at his neck... Taeminnie...

"Joe... let him go... it's okay..." Jinki said when Kibum literally changed... This is a connection... he mind it j ust like me… the electronic shocks… as really for fortune…

"Sir... he wanted to attack you..." The man breathed.

"No... he wouldn‘t hurt... is it right... Dino?" He looked into my eyes.

He said Dino for first time! I narrowed my eyes to the shine, but then I took a breath and nodded.

“Sure... I won‘t hurt... I'm not a murderer... just... a playful puppy..." I noted with a grin on my lips.

 

 

Onew’s POV

There will be a good dinner tonight, if not, I will be amazed!

"Hyung, wait!" There was a deep voice behind me and when I turned, I saw Minho when I smiled and waited for him.

"What do you think about that two boy… did they get well in the cell?" He smiled when he came near me.

I shrugged. "Perhaps well... they already understood to each other in the dining room," I smiled and nodded when we went to the cell.

"Well, well ... it would be fine," Minho said when I only nodded.

We came to the cell. Both boys were on their beds.

"Guys! I'm here, we're going to eat!" I said with a smile.

"And don‘t you want to bring us the food here when you're so full of energy?" Jonghyun laughed. He would have liked it! He was really inventive boy…

"Mhm ... I really don‘t want to! Do what I told you..." I laughed and unlocked the cell.

"Bummie..." Minho said.

"Minho!" Kibum whispered, jumping on his feet and going quickly to the big frog as Jongie had called him… where he got these nicknames.

"Aigoo..." Hyunnie groaned. He is such a lazy puppy. He would rather died then go to have a dinner?

"Come on or you'll be hungry," I smiled.

"The comfort like this is sometimes damaging..." he grinned, but then he finally stood up.

"Well, you see Puppy, how good you can listen to me," I grinned as he walked over to me and patted my face. Like seriously? I took my baton inconspicuously.

"Hey... Puppy... don‘t provoke and go..." I winked at him and softly hit his with my baton.

"Hey!" he jerked and wanted to jum on me. I knew that he didn’t want to kill me… certainly not… but Joe, who stood close to us, took a paralyzer with a weak strain, but it still could make person yell.

"Aaaaaa!!!" Jonghyun screamed and Kibum growled.

I thought that he would go and beat Joe but Minho caught Kibum tightly. I was a bit… surprised… from what I saw in Hyun’s eyes. There was so much hate… but it didn’t belong towards me… he didn’t look directly at me. Surprisingly, I watched them both… especially Joe who could compete against white wall. I had to do something!

"Joe... let him go... it's okay..." I breathed out… I was uncomfortable… this situation… Kibum also sent daggers into Joe’s eyes.

I felt the tension… the tension everywhere… I bit my lip inside.

"Sir... he wanted to attack you..." Joe breathed out. I understood… why he called himself as Dino… It could be mean an abbreviation of words… one of them is definitely Nightmare.

"No... he wouldn‘t hurt... is it right... Dino?" I looked into Hyun’s eyes, he narrowed his eyes which were shinning but then he nodded and took a breath.

“Sure... I won‘t hurt... I'm not a murderer... just... a playful puppy..." he noted with a grin on his lips.

Joe looked at him in confusion and took a deep breath, but finally he let go of the young man. Hyun shrugged his shoulders, grunted softly, but put his hands in his pockets and went to me.

"I can‘t jump around your neck when I want to tickle you?“ he pouted. Oh, such a baby…

"No, puppy," I smiled.

"That's pretty unfair, do you know that?" He looked into my eyes.

"Yeah, that's it." I nodded and smiled.

"But ... Kibum can hang on to Minho!" He frowned, but he broke away.

I walked to him and smiled. "That's because he doesn‘t jump after Minho hits him with a baton..." I smiled.

"Yeah ... you'll pay me for that, no one will be hitting my !" He stuck his tongue at me when Minho chuckled behind us.

“I do not know what are you laughing about!" Hyun snapped looking at the boys, who were behind us and obviously enjoyed this!

"But you go... Dinopuppy!" I smiled and patted Hyun's head when he stopped and frowned.

"How did you call me?" He watched me when I laughed.

"That you are my Dinopuppy," I grinned when he hissed.

The other prisoners walked around us and I took Hyun around his shoulder and led him to the dining room.

"Don‘t you like that?" I smiled innocently.

"No!" He snapped.

"You're in the mood," I smiled and walked into the dining room.

"Don’t be surprised when a little rabbit wants to make me pissed!“ he muttered and sat down at the table.

"If that will help you, Jinki loves tofu and chicken..." Minho grinned and sat down with Kibum in front of Jjong when I sat beside Hyunnie.

"Mhm... so... tofu rabbit... chicken..." Jongie grinned and looked at me.

"Tss ... go for a meal..." I laughed.

"I'll go for it," Kibum grinned, standing up and walking.

"I don‘t know how he can carry so much plates," Minho laughed looking at Kibum.

"He must be strong enough to do what someone wants..." Hyun muttered. I blinked in surprise, looking at him.

"What does someone want?" I asked.

"Let's... survive in this hole," he breathed, turning his head.

Kibum walked to us. He had trays like in the afternoon.

 "I... see..." I nodded and stretched.

"I don‘t know what dinner is supposed to be, but it looks like it should be tasty..." Kibum breathed out and put the tray on the table and divided the plates, plates and glasses of juice.

"That's a bibimbap with a tofu," I smiled and stretched.

"I see..." Jonghyun nodded and took the chopsticks that Kibum had given him when Kibum sat down on a chair beside Minho.

"So eat ..." I winked.

"Eat well..." Hyun muttered and began to eat.

"Eat well..." Kibum nodded and ate as well.

Inside came the last prisoners of the group who were allowed to be here at this hour. I took a breath and breathed out.

"Tofu, don‘t you want a tofu?" Hyun said suddenly.

"I don‘t want to, thank you," I smiled.

"Do you think it's poisoned?" Hyun looked suspiciously at me.

"I'm sorry, I just don‘t want ..." I breathed.

But Hyun suddenly grabbed my chin, forced me to open my mouth and put in my mouth tofu! He is really provocateur! I widened my eyes.

"Just eat... you have the clever bits tonight," he grinned, patting my face. Minho was laughing and I ate bibimbap.

"You see, you taste it," Hyun grinned and ate.

I ruffled his hair and chuckled. "You are a terrible brat," I laughed.

"Like you!" he stuck his tongue at me and drank.

"Minho… eat!“ Kibum spoke and stuffed a piece of food into the mouth of Minho.

"We’llbbbb!" He whimpered when I laughed.

"What is this language?" I grinned and glanced at Minho who frowned at me but ate the bite that he had in his mouth and Kibum smiled innocently at him.

"You're terrible .... Both of you," Minho breathed, shaking his head.

"We know," Hyun grinned and finished eating and drinking.

"Now it is the time to go to the dreams," Hyun said. „Yeah…“ Kibum grinned.

"Come on," I laughed and stood up when the boys went to take the trays and I went with Minho to the door outside of the dining room.

"Can they come alone from tomorrow, what do you think?" Minho smiled at me and I looked at him in surprise.

"Do you want to risk?" I blinked.

"Well... they're two and they don’t let themselves in danger... and there's security and cameras everywhere," he breathed out.

"That's true, but so... I don‘t know… at least there may not be rumours that we are too much with them,“ I sighed.

"As if you ever took them seriously..." Minho laughed.

"Well, I didn‘t ... you're right..." I nodded with a smile.

"So you see... maybe it will be fine..." Minho nodded and I breathed and looked at the boys who were coming to us.

"What are you contemplating here? We will be jealous!" Hyun laughed when I blinked.

"Be jealous? Why?" I breathed out.

"Soooo... Bummie is with Minho and you're just my psychologist..." He grinned.

"I see..." I chuckled and shook my head.

"Come on, you two jealous babbies," Minho laughed, taking Kibum around his waist and I took Hyun around his shoulders.

 "Tsk... Tsk..." Hyun snapped.

"Hey, you're a puppy and not a cat... they are hissing..." I laughed.

"Because I'm Dinopuppy and it can do anything!" He stuck at me his tongue again when I laughed and shook my head when we came to their cell in a while.

"So let’s go in, sirs, please…“ I grinned and opened their cell when I stepped back.

"Aigooo... I don’t want to... I want to hear a goodnight story!" Jonghyun said.

"I really don‘t read that... I'm hungry, so we’ll have a dinner… go in the cell, you both,“ I smiled.

"You were supposed to eat with us!" Jongie snapped and walked into the cell when I laughed and looked at Kibum who got a kiss from Minho, but then went to the cell behind Hyun.

"You can think of a fairy tale, you're two here, so, tell it by yourselves," Minho grinned when I laughed and locked the cell.

"Haha! Funny, Frog!" Hyun grinned when Minho chuckled and shook his head.

"Good guys," I laughed, but walked away with Minho.

Today was a very busy day... We went to the restaurant, we ate and then we both drove home. I fell asleep soon after the shower. Now I didn‘t have night service due to Hyun...

This time…no one of previous strange people… came into my dream… Not only them…

Jonghyun’s POV

Finally, that jerk let me go! I sank my shoulders, growled softly and put my hands into my pockets when I went to Jinki. The bastard who held me made me really pissed.

"I can‘t jump around your neck when I want to tickle you?“ I pouted.

"No, puppy," I smiled. He took it so much in peace! Sure! It was because he didn’t want to be tickled and I couldn’t do it!

"That's pretty unfair, do you know that?" I looked into his eyes.

"Yeah, that's it." he nodded and smiled. He would still keep that his smile! I glance dat Kibum. It wasn’t fair!

"But ... Kibum can hang on to Minho!" I frowned, but I walked where I though that we were going. Jinki walked to me and smiled.

"That's because he doesn‘t jump after Minho hits him with a baton..." he smiled.

And there we had that stupid baton! What the hell was that supposed to mean?!

"Yeah ... you'll pay me for that, no one will be hitting my !" I stuck my tongue at him when Minho chuckled behind us. Oh, now we had there some laughing frog!

“I do not know what are you laughing about!" I snapped looking at the boys, who were behind us and obviously… They enjoyed it on my account!

"But you go... Dinopuppy!" Jinki smiled and patted my head. I stopped and frowned. What did he say? Did I hear him well?

"How did you call me?" I watched him when he laughed. How he did dare to laugh?!

"That you are my Dinopuppy," he grinned when I hissed. He was too much over me! I wouldn’t allow him it! No! He couldn’t be over me!

I hissed again and didn’t pay attention to the other prisoners who were walking around us. Jinki took me around my shoulder and led me to the dining room.

"Don‘t you like that?" he smiled innocently. I would make a tattoo of his smile somewhere on his body!

"No!" I snapped.

"You're in the mood," Jinki smiled and walked into the dining room. And he is wondering?! I will bite him and he will see!

"Don’t be surprised when a little rabbit wants to make me pissed!“ I muttered and sat down at the table.

"If that will help you, Jinki loves tofu and chicken..." Minho grinned and sat down with Kibum in front of me when Jinki sat beside me. I wanted to make him fall from that chair…

"Mhm... so... tofu rabbit... chicken..." I grinned and looked at Jinki.

"Tss... go for a meal..." Jinki laughed.

Well, please, he didn‘t like it, but he would scold me for the puppies! But that is not the deafness of Hyunnie... you like each other! But it's hard! And silence either! I buried myself in my mind.

"I'll go for it," Kibum grinned, standing up and walking. That is good boy!

"I don‘t know how he can carry so much plates," Minho laughed looking at Kibum.

"He must be strong enough to do what someone wants..." I muttered.

Jinki blinked in surprise and looked at me.

"What does someone want?" he asked. In other words, he again asked for something what meant nothing good for him!

"Let's... survive in this hole," I breathed, turning my head as I looked at Kibum.

He walked to us with trays. I wasn’t going to discuss with Jinki about this. There was nothing about it.

"I... see..." Jinki nodded and stretched.

"I don‘t know what dinner is supposed to be, but it looks like it should be tasty..." Kibum breathed out and put the tray on the table and divided the plates, plates and glasses of juice.

"That's a bibimbap with a tofu," rabbit smiled and stretched. Yummy! But I didn’t like it how it seemed!

"I see..." I nodded and took the chopsticks that Kibum had given me when Kibum sat down on a chair beside Minho.

They were nice togehter. You two with Jinki too! Hey!

"So eat ..." Jinki winked.

"Eat well..." I muttered and began to eat.

"Eat well..." Kibum nodded and ate as well. But he ate like he hasn’t eaten for weeks!

I can give to Jinki too… Completed romance, Hyunnie! Silence either, I just want to know and be sure that it’s not poisoned!

"Tofu, don‘t you want a tofu?" I said.

"I don‘t want to, thank you," he smiled.

But he will eat!

"Do you think it's poisoned?" I looked suspiciously at me.

"I'm sorry, I just don‘t want ..." he breathed.

I didn’t believe him! He will eat… he is tofu like Minho said! I grabbed his chin, forced him to open his mouth and put in his mouth tofu, well, it was bibimbap, but I gave him mainly tofu! Jinki’s eyes widened.

"Just eat... you have the clever bits tonight," I grinned, patting his face. Minho was laughing. I watched Jinki and enjoyed it.

"You see, you taste it," I grinned and ate then too. he ruffled his hair and chuckled.

"You are a terrible brat," he laughed.

"Like you!" I stuck my tongue at him and drank.

"Minho… eat!“ Kibum spoke and stuffed a piece of food into the mouth of Minho.

"We’llbbbb!" He whimpered when Jinki laughed.

"What is this language?" he grinned and glanced at Minho who frowned at Jinki but ate the bite that he had in his mouth and Kibum smiled innocently at him.

"You're terrible .... Both of you," Minho breathed, shaking his head.

"We know," I grinned and finished eating and drinking.

"Now it is the time to go to the dreams," I said. „Yeah…“ Kibum grinned.

"Come on," Jinki laughed and stood up when me and Kibum got up and walked to put trays where they took place.

I noticed that the kitchen is now unguarded and... I saw a prison plan there too! I looked at Kibum. **Tomorrow we have to get that plan…** I stared at him when Kibum nodded.

**I understand... but I do not understand why...**

I grinned. Before Kibum would get it, will be already Christmas or maybe will it be in hundred years?

**I'll tell you in the cell…** I answered him and walked to Jinki and Minho. The two talked about something! But I didn‘t know what was going on! Kibum went straight after me.

"What are you contemplating here? We will be jealous!" I laughed when Jinki blinked.

"Be jealous? Why?" Jinki breathed out.

Because you love him, Jongie, look! No, I don’t! Look… No!

"Soooo... Bummie is with Minho and you're just my psychologist..." I grinned.

"I see..." Bunny chuckled and shook his head.

"Come on, you two jealous babbies," Minho laughed, taking Kibum around his waist and Jinki took me around shoulders.

What?! I will show show him so much babbies that he would see stars!

"Tsk... Tsk..." I snapped.

"Hey, you're a puppy and not a cat... they are hissing..." Jinki laughed. Why he was again like this! He wanted power over me! No way!

"Because I'm Dinopuppy and it can do anything!" I stuck at him mx tongue again when Jinki laughed and shook his head when we came to our cell in a while.

"So let’s go in, sirs, please…“ Jinki grinned and opened the cell when he stepped back. I didn’t want to go in!

"Aigooo... I don’t want to... I want to hear a goodnight story!" I said.

"I really don‘t read that... I'm hungry, so we’ll have a dinner… go in the cell, you both,“ Jinki smiled.

"You were supposed to eat with us!" I snapped and walked into the cell when Jinki laughed and Kibum followed me.

"You can think of a fairy tale, you're two here, so, tell it by yourselves," Minho grinned when Jinki laughed and locked us! Tsk, I would give them something… it was too funny that I will explode because of laugh!

"Haha! Funny, Frog!" I grinned when Minho chuckled and shook his head.

"Good night guys," Jinki laughed, but they both walked away.

 I snorted and sat down on the bed. Kibum sat beside me and looked at my eyes.

"What are you planning?" He asked me.

I just got into his head easily, so I just told him my... so our plan to escape...

"So it's thick!" Kibum grinned when I nodded.

"We just have to find out a few things and then... let's go…" I grinned and looked around, but stretched.

"Let's go to sleep," I winked at Kibum, when he nodded and went to his bed.

I didn’t pay attention to time, but I fell asleep soon.

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Okay, so next chapter for you guys <3 Hm, do you like it? I am showing you some details step by step... Jjong and Kibum are finally under contract and... as you can see, I put more JongYu! xD Well, they are teasing each other still.

Anyway my hints

Their escape will be at the NINTH Chapter... but... there is BIG BUT! xD

I will make another chapter as soon as it is possible, my semester's final exams are here from 3rd January, so I think that it would take me a bit time of translating, but I will do my best! 

Merry Christmas, my dear lovers and readers (I promise you that I will translate Xmas story JongTae and JongYu soon <3)

 

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Sapphireskye
#1
Chapter 16: Jongyu having a happy ending is always a great thing ♥
They can be together forever now as badass demons! Thank you for this amazing story ^^
Sapphireskye
#2
Chapter 15: Very y scene there, thank you for the update! ♥ I'm still reading ^^ Your stories are awesome, especially all the plot ideas that you have.
You could always ask for a beta-reader on this site or let someone do it whose close to you. There is also this program called 'Grammarly' it points out the mistakes you made and gives certain suggestions for a word. English isn't my first language either so I know how you feel ;)
Sapphireskye
#3
Chapter 14: Certainly enjoyed the chapter, haha finally some action (≧▽≦)
Jjongie with his parents was cute ♥

Thanks for writing!
Sapphireskye
#4
Chapter 13: They found Taemin woeeee! Are they JongTae's parents?
I wouldn't mind for Jjong to be the pregnant one either (◕‿-)
Thank you for this chapter!
vicistar #5
Chapter 12: Please let them reunited with taemin ٩(๑´3`๑)۶
I don't know what should i vote, i want jjong get pregnant instead XD
Good luck for your last exam... ❤️❤️❤️
Sapphireskye
#6
Chapter 11: This looks really good! I really like your Jongyu ♥
I can't wait for the next chapter!
vicistar #7
Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Jongyu ❤️ and jinki sacrifice + jonghyun openness made my day, I'm glad i started my day reading this uwu
It's the time to saving taetae...where are you tae??
vicistar #8
Chapter 10: Jongyu's first kissssssss❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
finally jinki made first move uwu
My fav line must be the ine when jinks said "don't run without me,please" ٩(♡ε♡ )۶
Omg i too much progress xD


Good luck for you exams,
I got some too >.<
lacus_clyne
#9
Chapter 9: Jinki.... You sneaky (~_^)
What gonna happen in next chapter???
Can't wait!!!!