Chapter 2: Wow, If only I have the courage, of Sohye.. I can do anything. This is like a teaching to me, don't be afraid of doing something that needed to be done. Nice story

Chapter 2: I agree with the other commentors. There are also a few word choice problems, but nothing too major. One thing, were they called ideals because their solution to bring the kingdoms together were idealistic ideas?? Idk i might be reading too much in between the lines but if I'm right, that's a really clever thing to do!

Chapter 1: This story was really cute and refreshing. It felt fresh and innocent. I agree with one of the other commentors that it was nice that the story didn't end with a kiss because that usually seems so rushed and sudden. I also agree that some parts of the story felt very fandom specific. I don't know much about IOI or Gugudan so I had no idea who most of the characters were or some of the inside jokes. I did think the lunch scene added to the story in that it helped Sejeong realize she should confess, but maybe if there were only one character like Sally then it might have been less confusing. I did like the touch of including the song lyric as a book quote, I thought that was cute and smart.

Chapter 1: I’m pleasantly surprised that Sejeong and Nayoung didn’t kiss by the end of the one-shot. :’D Except for a few fanfics that I read where the main characters didn’t exactly express their emotions to one another, all the rest had the couple ending with a kiss. It’s nice to see a fanfic where it varies from the rest, it’s a very refreshing feeling! (✿´‿`)

I really like this fanfic, me likey! <3

Chapter 1: Nice and sweet. It made me smile to read something with Sejeong in it. I like her. And great job authornim.

Chapter 1: Aah, cute! (^ヮ^)b

There were a few places where I felt a little lost... I think maybe because they were "fandom" (something that someone who follows this group would know well, but not an outsider)? Like the lunch break scene (⌒_⌒;) I just couldn't figure out who those other girls were and what was going on. If you were writing this only for that fandom it would have been fine, but since you are doing this for Open Writing Club (which has people from all different fandoms) it'd be good if you described or show in some way how secondary characters connect to the main characters. Other than that, great job!! (⌒ヮ⌒)

Chapter 1: aww the ending~
good job! it was a nice read ^^