Chapter 8: Okay. Kudos for handling Seungri's thoughts after the attempted , that internal monologue was wonderfully crafted and it fitted his personality well. BUT the way you handled the current aftermath of the attempted in this chapter is not, dare I say, appropriate? It just felt disconnected and apathetic. Like you wrote the attempted with compassion for the victim but when it was time to give healing to Seungri, you decided to become apathetic towards the crime and treated it as if it was merely a kiss with another decent human being. It just saddens me that you mistreated the tragedy of Seungri at the part where he needed it the most, which is healing for both him and Jiyong. It wouldve been the highlight of the story.
Chapter 9: I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH!!! so sad but sweet at the same times. Riri need decrease his insecurity abt the past of himself. Jiyong will love you the way u are. I hope you guys life happily each other and forgetting the bad past, continue your life with full of love...
Chapter 7: Omgg who is exactly those ert man? Just random guy??? It must traumatic seungri so much and should bear it alone. bcs of those stupid man, my nyongtory should through this hell road
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