Chapter 1: I can relate to those feelings to well right now, my boyfriend broke up with me, and even though i know he doesn't want me back, i still cling to the hope that one day he will & despite what people say to me, i know i would go running back to him if he wanted me.
I hate his feeling, but i like this story, you wrote it well.
The emotions are real, and although its sad, it still gives me hope :') Thank you
Chapter 1: oh. I thought it was that his parents put him in an arranged marriage and he lied to her and had to change up his whole life to appease the new girl and his family and stuff. But nah, he just made a mistake and now wants her back, lol. Guess I read/watch to many cliche stories haha.
Just a tip tho, always make sure to space into a new paragraph once you have like 4/5 sentences. Cause otherwise the lines start to run together as the reader is faced with a massive wall of text to read, and each line has less significance because the reader pays less attention because they are starting to skim through the text to get to the point (really just wanting to find another line break that signals the start of a new paragraph so their eyes get a bit of a break from all the letters on screen.) Plus with the chapter layout you use, it pushes all the text together into a thinner column than the default aff has. So long paragraphs seem even longer since the lines are shorter, naturally creating a lot more lines to go through than if they ran they had the space to be longer. Hope that is helpful^^
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