Chapter One

The Queen's Dragon
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Water has many sounds; it can be chiming and piercing or a mere deep hum. It is so much more than just a loud whoosh or a soft gurgle. Sometimes it’s gentle, almost hushing. Soothing like the most calming lullaby of lands from afar and tells almost too old to be told. Other times it’s an ear-shattering loud and ground shaking. Manipulative and empathic similar to bloodthirsty battle songs. Intense like heavy war drums, preparing men for the combat and cry for the clashing of steel. While trumpets call for courage and pride and roaring tubas, mourning for the fallen. Mostly it is like a madrigal or a march, happily gushing and addictively mumbling while it flows through the city. The fulminant hymn of Afohnies is everything but never quiet.

Except for this one fateful day, when the Watergates were closed and forced Mother Nature to go against the law of the tides. As the main river, Afohn runs in the opposite direction. It’s was the day when the city swathed in silence. Windows covered with the town’s beautiful navy blue flag embroidered with a magnificent silver Dragon - the cities emblem and patron; Leviathan. Blood red flowers are thrown into the water, and elegantly searched their ways around the shrill neigh of the protesting Kelpies. They were not used to pull those heavy ballasted galleons across the canal.

It could have been a day like every other day in Afohnies; it surely started like one. The Dockworkers just set for an early brunch, as the port cleared exceptionally fast today. Punctuality is a must in the harbor, as the tides never wait of the tardy. Once the direction turns the chance to move out is gone till the tides reserve again. Of course, there are the sluices which could manually change the orientation of the main canal. It is frown upon to use, but the main reason might just be that it is quite costly. Since most people try to avoid any extra expenses, it became a rarity to exceptional urgencies. Hence it comes to no surprise that the closing of the gate can quickly grow to an attraction. Children would sneak out or skip school, and even workers close the doors to see the falls retain the water.

However, it is never idle for long at the port. As soon as the tides would have set and the current steadies the piers become lively and busy yet again. In the early morning and always tight the late night fishers return, and soon after the daily business starts. The fishermen and anglers who haven't been out at night leave first. Then the larger vessels set sail and lastly the ferries. The tides would change around noon again, which meant lunchtime for the port workers. A break they are more than grateful for as they need to be ready for the hardest and most hectic time of the day. Afternoon, that's when the fluyts of the traders will arrive. Despite the up-pulling strength of the current; fully loaded cargo ships are often too chunky to manage to go upstream by themselves. Kelpies were harnessed to help the ships maneuver into safe harbor.

Afohnies locates in between two countries, Landar and Vanon and parts two big oceans Medan and Miracific. It almost looks like the both countries were split apart and according to historical dated fairy tales, that's exactly what has happened. But those were tells from a long forgotten time. With no records. Not even in the great books of the castle's library. At least not to Sohee’s knowledge and she has more or less secretly read almost all the books her family has gathered. Or as many as she could have managed in her young life of just twenty-four years or Var-Dai festivals. The most important days of the year. A festival of cleansing, celebrating their independence and liberty, and honoring the gods and patrons. They were a lot of entertaining activities during the three days the festival lasted. Some rather dangerous, such as the Kelpie rodeo, others competitive like the fishing contest another compelling as the ship-soapbox canal race. Musician duel with each other, creating the prettiest duet with the towns own melody. Magician, captivate the heart of the public with their tricks, and acrobats fascinate with their flexibility and dangerous stunts. The market is packed with rarities from all over the world, as some merchants only came by for those days of the year. Knowing alluring stories from countries further away then the maps show, awakening children's imagination. The highlights are to everyone different. To Sohee it is the floating lanterns, which mark the end of the merry feast.
There is something magical about lanterns. Maybe it’s the little burning flame, which flickers happily in its beautiful prison. They warm and solace its spends or how it illuminates the darkest hours. It's absolutely enchanting when they float. The lights dance through the city almost as if spirited. Reality and dream merge, and a faint shine of the candles is enough to enlighten the water roads. As the light reflects from the shining surface, casting deli

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-Tigress-
#1
Chapter 5: Ah this chapter still affects me. The ending part about Jay and the story shared, ugh it's so bitter and sad without being bitter, you know? I am so so so so curious though as to what that letter says and so really, honey, get to writing haha ;)
but honestly, I don't think I say it enough but I am so very much enjoying how you're building this world. It's enticing and fun and rounded and I am so very curious how it will play out! Especially since SOMEONE isn't giving me spoilers lol. But the way that you take the time to describe the surroundings and really set the scene, while adding emotional connections to places and people, it really does remind me of a published novel. Wel done my dear ♡
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#2
Chapter 4: LMAO Bomi's inrush soll makes me laugh. Okay though, I really like the additions made to this chapter and how you cut it. Channie was perfect in his role and the idea of a gentle giant baking is just adorable ♡.♡ I tried to guess who the unclothed man was but there are so many idols that I gave up! I guess I'll wait and see haha.
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#3
Ooooooh I see you mention VIXX as characters.... that makes me think your little revenge is coming for my Ken Ken haha. =D
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#4
Chapter 4: Awww gosh well that was ended on a sad note. I actually loved how natural that conversation between the tow of them felt. It really did flow so well and lead one topic to the next... great job! And Minjun, despite only having a bit if "screen time" really shines as a character. Bomi's appearance made me laugh, and Minjun's comment about her. And then of course Jiyong's ungenerous opinion of baby Sohee at the moment. He'll change his mind when he reads the note and sees her! Thank you so much for the update darlidadarling, it really made my day better ♡♡♡
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#5
Chapter 3: OMO first off I have to say that your mention of "puppy of a human" made me giggle, that very much sounds so much like Baekho ♡.♡ And then Sunggyu is in perfect casting, he is definitely the stingy and pompous dockmaster!!! So I really liked seeing those two even with their small roles and how well they fit them!!! Oh and i see why you wondered about the petri-heil haha. =) It works!
I really love how Jiyong's chapter is so different from Sohee's pov, like you see how he is very much tired and grumpy at having to work and very much desires to leave Afohnies! The opening made me laugh, I can picture him being too stubborn to give Sunggyu the satisfaction of seeing him fail haha. But I did pause at the Moby reference because I wasn't expecting to see a literary work references in a a fantasy world haha. It worked, though, and I like how you talk about his education here without yet absolutely having to.. it sets who he is and how he came to be himself in really nice tones. My only other question is if everyone will speak with the same accent sunggyu has? or is he from somewhere else that gives him that way of speech?
The dolphins bit made me laugh. I was not expecting Jiyong to be a fisherman and so it was a small shock to me, but it makes so much sense and yes, I think he is like a lion in dress... ill-suited to this and wanting to be back where he is king! So I look forward to more!!! FIGHTING!!!
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#6
Chapter 2: OH MY GOSH this is a beautiful intro!!!
I love the way it starts off, talking about the hymn of Afohnies, and then shifting into about how it's all just not happening right then. That made a drastic comparison that was really striking! I loved picturing the banners over the windows and the red roses in the waters, I have to ask, it is for her Crowning that they throw the flowers?
I love how you explaind the setup of the city through using her memories. Thaat sibling scene was especially great, it showed the joy and closeness that they shared while also explaining how things work. And then you go and rip the heart out by telling of his death! T.T But that was a really great depiction, too. The way that you spoke of the hungry and broken families, and then shifted it in to speak of greed and the effects of it. I like the way you were like, "even the fairest man" and then shifted to tell that you meant her father, that was so cleverly done!And really sad too.
The explanation of the festival is probably my favorite part of the chapter: I love the part you wrote about the lanterns and how she pictures them as souls. Her wishes afterward really made it feel striking and it lingered in my heart!
And then you end with that sentence. Goodness that was really good! I really liked how you don't actually tell that she has become the Queen, but well I mean it's implied in the title so it is obvious haha, but I like that you didn't state it outright. And the adjucting the burdensome crown... Perfect.
I am so looking forward to reading more!!!
-Tigress-
#7
OMG you updated!!!! ♡♡♡♡ I will read as soon as I'm out of a moving vehicle hahaha
DGNA_Forever
#8
This looks so cool! I love kingdom stories, so I look forward to seeing what you do with it♡. Good luck!
-Tigress-
#9
Chapter 1: OMO honey is this advert supposed to be in here? =)
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#10
ASFGHJKL THAT DESCRIPTION! OH I got tingles!