Chapter 5: Ah this chapter still affects me. The ending part about Jay and the story shared, ugh it's so bitter and sad without being bitter, you know? I am so so so so curious though as to what that letter says and so really, honey, get to writing haha ;)
but honestly, I don't think I say it enough but I am so very much enjoying how you're building this world. It's enticing and fun and rounded and I am so very curious how it will play out! Especially since SOMEONE isn't giving me spoilers lol. But the way that you take the time to describe the surroundings and really set the scene, while adding emotional connections to places and people, it really does remind me of a published novel. Wel done my dear ♡

Chapter 4: LMAO Bomi's inrush soll makes me laugh. Okay though, I really like the additions made to this chapter and how you cut it. Channie was perfect in his role and the idea of a gentle giant baking is just adorable ♡.♡ I tried to guess who the unclothed man was but there are so many idols that I gave up! I guess I'll wait and see haha.

Ooooooh I see you mention VIXX as characters.... that makes me think your little revenge is coming for my Ken Ken haha. =D

Chapter 4: Awww gosh well that was ended on a sad note. I actually loved how natural that conversation between the tow of them felt. It really did flow so well and lead one topic to the next... great job! And Minjun, despite only having a bit if "screen time" really shines as a character. Bomi's appearance made me laugh, and Minjun's comment about her. And then of course Jiyong's ungenerous opinion of baby Sohee at the moment. He'll change his mind when he reads the note and sees her! Thank you so much for the update darlidadarling, it really made my day better ♡♡♡

Chapter 3: OMO first off I have to say that your mention of "puppy of a human" made me giggle, that very much sounds so much like Baekho ♡.♡ And then Sunggyu is in perfect casting, he is definitely the stingy and pompous dockmaster!!! So I really liked seeing those two even with their small roles and how well they fit them!!! Oh and i see why you wondered about the petri-heil haha. =) It works!
I really love how Jiyong's chapter is so different from Sohee's pov, like you see how he is very much tired and grumpy at having to work and very much desires to leave Afohnies! The opening made me laugh, I can picture him being too stubborn to give Sunggyu the satisfaction of seeing him fail haha. But I did pause at the Moby reference because I wasn't expecting to see a literary work references in a a fantasy world haha. It worked, though, and I like how you talk about his education here without yet absolutely having to.. it sets who he is and how he came to be himself in really nice tones. My only other question is if everyone will speak with the same accent sunggyu has? or is he from somewhere else that gives him that way of speech?
The dolphins bit made me laugh. I was not expecting Jiyong to be a fisherman and so it was a small shock to me, but it makes so much sense and yes, I think he is like a lion in dress... ill-suited to this and wanting to be back where he is king! So I look forward to more!!! FIGHTING!!!

Chapter 2: OH MY GOSH this is a beautiful intro!!!
I love the way it starts off, talking about the hymn of Afohnies, and then shifting into about how it's all just not happening right then. That made a drastic comparison that was really striking! I loved picturing the banners over the windows and the red roses in the waters, I have to ask, it is for her Crowning that they throw the flowers?
I love how you explaind the setup of the city through using her memories. Thaat sibling scene was especially great, it showed the joy and closeness that they shared while also explaining how things work. And then you go and rip the heart out by telling of his death! T.T But that was a really great depiction, too. The way that you spoke of the hungry and broken families, and then shifted it in to speak of greed and the effects of it. I like the way you were like, "even the fairest man" and then shifted to tell that you meant her father, that was so cleverly done!And really sad too.
The explanation of the festival is probably my favorite part of the chapter: I love the part you wrote about the lanterns and how she pictures them as souls. Her wishes afterward really made it feel striking and it lingered in my heart!
And then you end with that sentence. Goodness that was really good! I really liked how you don't actually tell that she has become the Queen, but well I mean it's implied in the title so it is obvious haha, but I like that you didn't state it outright. And the adjucting the burdensome crown... Perfect.
I am so looking forward to reading more!!!

OMG you updated!!!! ♡♡♡♡ I will read as soon as I'm out of a moving vehicle hahaha

This looks so cool! I love kingdom stories, so I look forward to seeing what you do with it♡. Good luck!

Chapter 1: OMO honey is this advert supposed to be in here? =)

ASFGHJKL THAT DESCRIPTION! OH I got tingles!