Chapter 1: OMG. Sad ending . I can't but I love it

Chapter 1: well, mafiaau, gangau or anything related to crime are always a few of my favourite genre.
The story is quite short and Im honestly wishing it to be a tad bit longer.

BUT, this is actually really good ya know.
For one shot fic, the flow is good and the plot is quite well built. Im supposed since this is a one shot, not much details like the character's background, or maybe a more description about how the couple begin and developing perhaps? or how Leo and Yixing silently makes plan since they abruptly abducted Jia. How in the world that Leo and Lay able to plan really fast? That is the things that quite bothering me. Other than that...it is good.
This is still really good tho. The flow does not feel awkward. It all makes sense just the cruelness of the VIXX member.

Hahahahaha I shouldnt laugh but the reason of VIXX and EXO rivalry is quite obvi. Like it is a fact, EXO and VIXX REALLY DID DEBUT AT THE SAME TIME. I remembered watching music shows of their hot debut. Vixx with Superhero and the concept was quite bright while Exo with Mama and they went with the mystery, alien ish concept. Now...Exo is rather well known than Vixx. I like the way you somehow tweaked the things. You make it as they form the gang around the same time but Exo rise higher than Vixx.
When I read the doctor name...I was like Dr. Lu? I miss Lu Han T^T

Im kind of hate Sehun here. He clearly being immature here. Instead of calmly talking to Jia and try to clear the misunderstanding. He resort to drinking and messing around with random girl?! His character here seems like he is a person who is quick to jump into conclusion without trying to find out first about it. But then...Im supposed that he is the youngest here. He still lack in love relationship...I supposed so. While Jia...there is nothing much to reveal about her. Apart from her being a bit insecure of Sehun's reaction and love to her. But then Im think it is because she and Sehun is still young. She might expect Sehun to go against it.

Anyway, all of it is great. You did well^^

P.S to any Starlight: I loves VIXX too ♡♡ and excuse me for my biasness since Im an Exo-L.

Chapter 1: This one shot is sooo daebak!! Sye sndiri bleh bygkn jalan crite n the whole prop with the acting n stuff... to be honest, saya ni cerewet skit tp one shot ni mmg trbaek!! Please buat lg!! ♡♡♡

This is sooo sad but I love it! Upvoted <3

Chapter 1: Hey why so sedih hm (╥_╥)

Tak sabar ^^